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describe a memory of your childhood -what it was -when it happened-How it affected your later life-whether you remember it as a pleasant or disgusting memory. v.1

describe a memory of your childhood -what it was -when it happened-How it affected your later life-whether you remember it as a pleasant or disgusting memory. v. 1
Nowadays, government or non-government organisations are spending plenty of money on the maintenance of old buildings. In the era of skyscrapers, it is a challenging task to renovate old structures. Some people believe that it is wastage of money and that funds should be used to build new buildings. Firstly, old buildings are not mere structures, but are heritage of a particular place. They represent the culture and history of a country. Their antique designs or structures need to be reserved for coming generations. The material used to develop those buildings is not available at present, so it involves huge cost to maintain and repair them. The major drawback of old structures is safety, which means they are not capable of handling natural disasters. To cite an example, "Taj Mahal" is one of the 7 wonders of the world. However, due to pollution, there is an adverse impact on the building which needs proper maintenance. On the other hand, new buildings would be safe and secure. They will be developed by using the latest material and designs. Furthermore, new structures in any country also represent the development of that particular nation. For an instance, in the past few decades, so many buildings are built in Dubai which is considered as a development. The world's biggest building “Burj Khalifa” is also a part of that. Hence, knocking down old buildings to build new ones is not a good idea. To sum up, I will conclude by saying that it would be a great initiative to make new buildings. But breaking down old structures is not an ideal choice. Besides, money should be spent wisely on old buildings by analysing their condition, whether they are capable of handling adverse environment in the future or not.
Nowadays,
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government
or non-
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government
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organisations
are spending
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plenty
of money on the maintenance of
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old
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buildings
. In the era of skyscrapers, it is a challenging task to renovate
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old
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structures
.
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Some
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people
believe that it is wastage of money and that funds should be
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used
to build
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new
buildings.

Firstly
,
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old
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buildings
are not mere
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structures
,
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but
are heritage of a particular place. They represent the culture and history of a country. Their antique designs or
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structures
need to
be reserved
for coming generations. The material
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used
to develop those
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buildings
is not available at present,
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so
it involves huge cost to maintain and repair them. The major drawback of
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old
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structures
is safety, which means they are not capable of handling natural disasters. To cite an example,
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"
Taj Mahal
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is one of the 7 wonders of the world.
However
, due to pollution, there is an adverse impact on the
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building
which needs proper maintenance.

On the other hand
,
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new
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buildings
would be safe and secure. They will
be developed
by using the latest material and designs.
Furthermore
,
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new
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structures
in any country
also
represent the development of that particular nation. For an instance, in the past few decades,
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so
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many
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buildings
are built
in Dubai which
is considered
as a development. The world's biggest
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building
“
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Burj
Khalifa” is
also
a part of that.
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, knocking down
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old
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buildings
to build
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new
ones is not a
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good
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idea
.

To sum up, I will conclude by saying that it would be a great initiative to
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make
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new
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buildings
.
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But
breaking down
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old
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structures
is not an ideal choice.
Besides
, money should
be spent
wisely
on
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old
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buildings
by
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analysing
their condition, whether they are capable of handling adverse environment in the future or not.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay describe a memory of your childhood -what it was -when it happened-How it affected your later life-whether you remember it as a pleasant or disgusting memory. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
293 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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