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DESCRIBE A festival in your country that are very interesting in you

DESCRIBE A festival in your country that are very interesting in you E905Q
Ok everybody, welcome to our trip today. I’m Nguyen and I’m here to talk to you about a religious festival in Vietnam. It is a famous festival, it is known as the Buddha Festival, we also call Budda’s birthday. It is help on the 8th day of the 4th lunar, and it takes place in many temples that are adorned with lavish decorations with local offering fruit, flower garlands, and so on. This festival celebrates the Buddha's birthday. People often go to the temple to perform religious rites and listen to Buddhist scriptures. This day is also a great time to enjoy delicious dishes sold by sreet
Ok everybody, welcome to our trip
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. I’m Nguyen and I’m here to talk to you about a religious
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festival
in Vietnam. It is a
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famous
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festival
, it
is known
as the Buddha
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, we
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Budda
’s birthday. It is
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help
on the 8th day of the 4th lunar, and it takes place in
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many
temples that
are adorned
with lavish decorations with local offering fruit, flower garlands, and
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festival
celebrates the Buddha's birthday.
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People
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go to the temple to perform religious rites and listen to Buddhist scriptures. This day is
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IELTS essay DESCRIBE A festival in your country that are very interesting in you

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
106 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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