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describe a favourite job that you would like to do when you finish university

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I have always wanted to become an actor for any kind of film from a premiere to blockbusters when I was knee-high to a grasshopper. The process of acting and preparing for a film is what I find intriguing and fascinating. I’d probably enjoy working and being trained in such a flexible and dynamic environment that is the actor industry. I would like to get to know the behind-the-scene procedure of creating from a small to a mega film. In Vietnam, there are a lot of amazing kinds of film companies but If I could choose, I’d say MTP entertainment is the company that I’d love to work for. Creating an error-free and successful film is my dream and I’m trying so hard to get to that position where I am competent to work in that position.
I have always wanted to become an actor for any kind of film from a premiere to blockbusters when I was knee-high to a grasshopper. The process of acting and preparing for a film is what I find intriguing and fascinating.

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enjoy working and
being trained
in such a flexible and dynamic environment
that is
the actor industry. I would like to
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get
to know the behind-the-scene procedure of creating from a
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small
to a mega film. In Vietnam, there are
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a lot of
amazing kinds of film
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companies
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If I could choose, I’d say MTP entertainment is the
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company
that I’d
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love
to work for.

Creating an error-free and successful film is my dream and I’m trying
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hard
to
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to that position where I am competent to work in that position.
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IELTS essay describe a favourite job that you would like to do when you finish university

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
137 words
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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