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Describe a change that you would like to see in your local area

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The change that I’d like to see in my local neighbourhood is the pedestrianisation of the main shopping street in the town centre. I’d like to see traffic diverted around this area in order to make it safer and more attractive for visitors and shoppers. Most of the traffic that clogs up the main street is just passing through the town, but it’s the local people who have to put up with the congestion, noise and pollution. It’s the job of the local council to make changes like the one I’m suggesting. But before the council does anything, there usually needs to be some pressure from local people to bring a problem to light. So, perhaps we need a campaign by local residents who want to see this change. Then the council might contract a town planner or an architect to come up with some possible designs for a new road system. I’m not sure how exactly the process of creating a pedestrian street would work, but I imagine that it would require detailed planning. Perhaps a bypass would need to be built around the town centre first. This would give drivers a faster alternative to driving through the town, and it would allow the main shopping street to be blocked off and pedestrianised. I’d like to see this change because it would really improve the quality of life of residents in the town where I live. I can imagine the new pedestrian street having cafes and restaurants with outdoor seating. It would be a safer and more pleasant place for families to go shopping, and I’m sure this would have a positive knock-on effect on local shops and businesses.
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attractive for visitors and shoppers. Most of the traffic that clogs up the main

street is
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put up with the congestion, noise and pollution.

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council to
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the council does anything, there
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pressure from
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a campaign by
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residents who want to
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this
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. Then the council

might contract a
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planner or an architect to
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up with
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some
possible

designs for a new road system.

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work,
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I imagine that it would require detailed planning. Perhaps a bypass

would need to
be built
around the
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town
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first
. This would give drivers a

faster alternative to driving through the
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, and it would
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the main

shopping street to
be blocked
off and
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.

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the quality of life

of residents in the
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where I
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live
. I can imagine the new pedestrian street

having
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and restaurants with outdoor seating. It would be a safer and

more pleasant place for families to go shopping, and I’m sure this would have

a
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positive
knock-on effect on
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shops and businesses.
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IELTS essay Describe a change that you would like to see in your local area

Essay
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5 paragraphs
280 words
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