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demonstrate the change of Islip town between 2010 and 2015

demonstrate the change of Islip town between 2010 and 2015 E7w6b
The provided pictures demonstrate the change of Islip town between 2010 and 2015. Over the period, the area witnessed dramatic developments that made infrastructure more and more modern. A huge range of new facilities were added in the north of the town to lead to the smaller area of countryside. Car park and bus station were constructed. A group of old shops was converted into a large shopping center. The number of houses were doubled from two to four buildings. Main road was replaced by the road which is only for residents and expanded into a dual carriageway that was built, and ran around the town. This way might connect the centre of the town with other further areas, and be easier for transport. In conclusion, the process of developing this small town was rapid and admirable, although this adjustment was presented in only five years. As a try of changing the faces of its area, and increasing the number of buildings, this innovation surely includes the resident's efforts in changing the quality of life, and the correctness of the government in urban planning. It could be seen that with this level of development, the Islip town would absolutely have more new architecture in the future
The provided pictures demonstrate the
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Islip
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town
between 2010 and 2015. Over the period, the
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area
witnessed dramatic developments that made infrastructure more and more modern.

A huge range of new facilities were
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added
in the north of the
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town
to lead to the smaller
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area
of countryside. Car park and bus station
were constructed
. A group of
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old
shops
was converted
into a large shopping center. The number of
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houses
were doubled
from two to four buildings. Main road
was replaced
by the road which is
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only
for residents and expanded into a dual carriageway that
was built
, and ran around the
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town
. This way might connect the
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centre
of the
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town
with other
further
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areas
, and be easier for transport.

In conclusion
, the process of developing this
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small
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town
was rapid and admirable, although this adjustment
was presented
in
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only
five years. As a try of changing the faces of its
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area
, and increasing the number of buildings, this innovation
surely
includes the resident's efforts in changing the quality of life, and the correctness of the
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government
in urban planning. It could be
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seen
that with this level of development, the
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Islip
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town
would
absolutely
have more new architecture in the
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future
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IELTS essay demonstrate the change of Islip town between 2010 and 2015

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
205 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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