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Some people believe that online classrooms are as effective as traditional ones and the government should make online schooling an option for students in the near future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that online classrooms are as effective as traditional ones and the government should make online schooling an option for students in the near future. with this statement? 8xXeP
A school of though holds that offline classrooms are as helpful as online ones and the authority ought to provide an opt for online class for scholar in the near future. From my perspective, I total disagree with this argument Interacting learning is more effective than online learning. In a traditional class, teacher will easily control student’s studying process and ensure that learning activities are carries out effectively. For instance, when student need to have a team work to discuss about one topic, in traditional class, student can contact and cooperate with each participator easily and teacher can walk around to check each group, answer questions and giving a little direction here and there if necessary. Thus, studying under supervision motivates student can learn harder. Whereas, in online class, student can suffer from connect adversities so it is quite difficult to do teamwork or access knowledge. Moreover, teacher can not control each other when they learn in online class consequently a huge number of student who are lazy and not self-awareness are not voluntarily study. Hence this phenomenon can affects the amount of knowledge absorbed Although traditional class is superior to online schooling, the authority ought to provide online class an option for graduate in the near future. It is undoubted that provide numerous merits for student and school. Online course allows students to attend classes from any location and access the learning material at a time of their comfort. As for the former, learning via internet also allowed schools to reach out a more extensive network of students, instead of being restricted by geographical boundaries. As for the latter, online lecture can be recorded, achieved and share for the future reference. In conclusion, I believed that student in face-to-face course performed better than those in online learning condition, whereas, government still ought to provide learning online for student as an option because it also bring numerous benefit for student if they know how to make good use of it
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ones and the authority ought to
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an opt
for
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online
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class
for scholar in the near future. From my perspective, I total disagree with this
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argument


Interacting
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learning
is more effective than
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online
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learning
. In a traditional
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class
, teacher will
easily
control
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student’s
studying process and ensure that
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learning
activities are carries out
effectively
.
For instance
, when
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student
need to have a team work to
Did you mean simply "discuss one"? You do not need the word "about" here.
discuss about one
topic, in traditional
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class
,
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student
can contact and cooperate with each participator
easily
and teacher can walk around to
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check
each group, answer questions and giving a
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little
direction here and there if necessary.
Thus
, studying under supervision motivates
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student
can learn harder. Whereas, in
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online
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class
,
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student
can suffer from connect adversities
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so
it is quite difficult to do teamwork or access knowledge.
Moreover
, teacher can not control each other when they learn in
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online
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class
consequently
a huge number of
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student
who are lazy and not self-awareness are not
voluntarily
study.
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Hence
this phenomenon can
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affects
the amount of knowledge absorbed

Although traditional
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class
is superior to
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online
schooling, the authority ought to
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provide
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online
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class
an option for graduate in the near future. It
is undoubted
that
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provide
numerous merits for
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student
and school.
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Online
course
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allows
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students
to attend
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classes
from any location and access the
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learning
material at a time of their comfort. As for the former,
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learning
via internet
also
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allowed
schools to reach out a more extensive network of
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students
,
instead
of
being restricted
by geographical boundaries. As for the latter,
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online
lecture can
be recorded
, achieved and share for the future reference.

In conclusion
, I believed that
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student
in face-to-face course performed better than those in
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online
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learning
condition, whereas,
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government
still
ought to
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provide
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learning
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online
for
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student
as an option
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because
it
also
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bring
numerous benefit for
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student
if they know how to
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make
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good
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use
of it
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IELTS essay Some people believe that online classrooms are as effective as traditional ones and the government should make online schooling an option for students in the near future. with this statement?

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
329 words
6.0
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