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Degrees granted at the National University

Degrees granted at the National University 11bDX

Given are three figure concerning degrees granted in various branches at the National University between 1990-2000 and 2010. Overall, computer science is the largest field at university as 30% in 1990, 40%in 2000, 45%in 2010. It's shown that computer science is risen up but business is fallen. It is apparent from the information supported medicine climbs exponentially at 25% and peaks at 30% in 2000. It is interesting to note that the branches of medicine stand at 25% in 1990-2010. As well apparent is the fact that, business is felt down 5% in each year. It is evident from the information provided that law is remained constant as 15% in 1990-2010, but felt steadily in 2000. As for the proportion of law is the lowest while computer science is the largest.

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 concerning degrees granted in various branches at the National University between 1990-2000 and 2010. Overall
, computer science is the largest field at university as 30% in 1990, 40%in 2000, 45%in 2010. It's shown that computer science is risen
 up This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 business is fallen
. It is apparent from the information supported medicine climbs exponentially
 at 25% and peaks at 30% in 2000. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
It
 is interesting to note that the branches of medicine stand at 25% in 1990-2010. As well
 apparent is the fact that, business is felt
 down 5% in each year. It is evident from the information provided that law is remained
 constant as 15% in 1990-2010, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 felt steadily
 in 2000. As for the proportion of law is the lowest while computer science is the largest. 