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Dear Mohan Sir, I am writing this letter with regards to request you for one week leave from work from 17th Jun to 24th Jun to finish my exams of microbiology course. I will cover these days with my weekly off days in the coming months of July and August. P v.1

Dear Mohan Sir, I am writing this letter with regards to request you for one week leave from work from 17th Jun to 24th Jun to finish my exams of microbiology course. I will cover these days with my weekly off days in the coming months of July and August. P v. 1
Many students are interested to continue their education in foreign universities. In my personal opinion, this is a positive sign. Even though there might be some problems involved, those can be resolved with minimal efforts. In this essay, we are going to discuss the benefits and the problems might occur in the process and how to overcome them. Students who are interested to study abroad is because of a lack of infrastructure and facilities in their home countries. First of all, meeting people from various countries increases communication and helps to understand the cultural differences between the people. Students will have an opportunity to learn new languages and adaptability. For example, one of my friends decided to go to London for higher studies. After crossing all the hurdles, he joined in a reputed university. He learned German and Spanish languages from his fellow students within six months. He was later appointed as an assistant professor at the same university. Of course, there are few problems in getting admission in well-known universities outside their place. University study is not so easy in terms of fees, many banking firms are now offering loans to students with less documentation. Almost every country permits the students to work a few hours a week along with their studies. So, students can utilize an opportunity to work and pay back to the bank once they have completed their course. Technology now offers a lot of tools to interact with their families or friends frequently without missing them. A statistical report from CNBC states, more than 70% of the students who are studying abroad are satisfied with their new lifestyle changes. To conclude, even though there are issues for a student to move abroad to study in universities, they will have several opportunities to overcome those problems and move forward.
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problems
involved, those can
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with minimal efforts. In this essay, we are going to discuss the benefits and the
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problems
might occur in the process and how to overcome them.

Students who
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to
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study
abroad is
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because
of a lack of infrastructure and facilities in their home countries.
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, meeting
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people
from various countries increases communication and
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helps
to understand the cultural differences between the
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people
.
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Students
will have an opportunity to learn new languages and adaptability.
For example
, one of my friends decided to go to London for higher
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studies
. After crossing all the hurdles, he
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joined
in a reputed
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university
. He learned German and Spanish languages from his fellow
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students
within six months. He was later appointed as an assistant professor at the same university.

Of course
, there are few
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problems
in getting admission in well-known
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universities
outside their place.
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study
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so
easy in terms of fees,
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many
banking firms are
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now
offering loans to
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students
with less documentation. Almost every country permits the
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students
to work a few hours a week along with their
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studies
.
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So
,
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students
can utilize an opportunity to work and pay back to the bank once they have completed their course. Technology
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now
offers
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a lot of
tools to interact with their families or friends
frequently
without missing them. A statistical report from CNBC states, more than 70% of the
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students
who are studying abroad
are satisfied
with their new lifestyle
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changes
.

To conclude
,
even though
there are issues for a
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student
to
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move
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study
in
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universities
, they will have several opportunities to overcome those
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problems
and
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forward.
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IELTS essay Dear Mohan Sir, I am writing this letter with regards to request you for one week leave from work from 17th Jun to 24th Jun to finish my exams of microbiology course. I will cover these days with my weekly off days in the coming months of July and August. P v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
303 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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