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Dating online seems to be increasingly widespread concern

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Dating online seems to be increasingly widespread concern. It has become popular for 5 years ago. This essay will discuss some reason will this has occurred and examine the consequences of this disquieting trend. In the pass, smartphone or internet was luxury items for many people so a few people own a mobile phone. Smartphone had an only function that is calling so they just used it for emergency and important jobs. Almost, they had a face-to-face conversation to discuss or talk about their jobs or make a date. This is no longer the case. Nowadays, life is more convenient because of progressive technology. Indeed, nowadays, smartphone and internet become common and afforedable so everybody owns a modern smartphone effortlessly. In addition, smartphone is progressive and has many useful functions which help people are easy to access social media such as Facebook, Zalo, Instagram. Thus, people can make friends and have a online communication, even dating online without going out or meeting in café. Consequently, advanced technology is convenient for people’ life. Another reason that people date online owing to busy work. In the past, development society was low and people didn’t need to work hard for raising themselve and their family. However, nowaday people have to work as busy as bee to have financial abilities for payment and moving. They almost work from dawn to dust so they have less opportunities for direct meeting or beginning a relationship. As a result for being tired for their jobs, they prefer staying at home and dating online to going out and find a boyfriend or girlfriend because it takes a lot of time to go out and meet directly. If they date online, they will lessen money and time for moving or going a cinema, because they can find out and care each other via video call or know about their information by social media. Therefore, dating online is a method for people who have busy work and still maintain a relationship. Of coures, this issue is bringing negative impacts to people. Because of progressive technology, defraudation in internet becomes more sophisticated and unrecognizable. They use modern softwares to edit their pictures become beautiful and illusional in order to trick money or relationship. To illutrate, someone accept a proposal for face-to-face conservation with stranger whom they just talk to via social media. Consequently, they are tricked and even kidnapped. If people just date online, they will misunderstand someone who they are dating. Because their information in social media is the tip of iceberg and they won’t know about their background totally and correctly if they just meet them online. Additionally, people have a long distance relationship and can’t meet them directly owing to busy work. It leads to misuderstanding and lessening care from their partners. To demontrate, they can’t go immediately and take care of their boyfriends or girlfriends whenever they need most due to busy work or long distance. Thus, their love and relationship can become weaker and break up. Besides, people can meet a love tricker who can make a date with them while they have a relationship with others. Because they don’t know about their relationship clearly so they are tricked easily and hurted when they date online. To sum up, some several elements lead to dating online and negative effects of this trend has serious result for people’ life. If people still continue dating online, they will have dangerous consequences and are difficult to have a long relationship.
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become
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reason will this has occurred and examine the consequences of this disquieting trend.

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people
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a few
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people
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a mobile phone. Smartphone had an
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function
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calling
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they
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it for emergency and
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jobs. Almost, they had a face-to-face conversation to discuss or talk about their jobs or
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make
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date
. This is no longer the case. Nowadays, life is more convenient
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because
of progressive technology.
Indeed
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become
common and
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afforedable
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everybody
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owns
a modern smartphone
effortlessly
.
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, smartphone is progressive and has
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many
useful functions which
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help
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people
are easy to access
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social
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media
such as Facebook,
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Zalo
, Instagram.
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,
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people
can
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make
friends and have
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a
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online
communication, even
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dating
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online
without going out or meeting in café.
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, advanced technology is convenient for
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people’
life.

Another reason that
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people
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date
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online
owing to
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busy
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work
. In the past, development society was low and
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people
didn’t need to
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work
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hard
for raising
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themselve
and their family.
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,
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nowaday
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people
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have to
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work
as
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as bee to have financial abilities for payment and moving. They almost
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work
from dawn to dust
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so
they have
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less
opportunities for direct meeting or beginning a
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relationship
.
As a result
for
being tired
for their jobs, they prefer staying at home and
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dating
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online
to going out and find a boyfriend or girlfriend
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because
it takes
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a lot of
time to go out and
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meet
directly
. If they
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date
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online
, they will lessen money and time for moving or going a cinema,
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because
they can find out and care each other via video call or know about their information by
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social
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media
.
Therefore
,
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dating
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online
is a method for
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people
who have
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and
still
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coures
, this issue is bringing
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negative
impacts to
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people
.
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Because
of progressive technology,
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defraudation
in internet
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becomes
more sophisticated and unrecognizable. They
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use
modern
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softwares
to edit their pictures
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become
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beautiful
and
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illusional
in order to trick money or
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relationship
. To
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illutrate
, someone
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accept
a proposal for face-to-face conservation with stranger whom they
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just
talk to via
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social
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media
.
Consequently
, they
are tricked
and even kidnapped. If
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people
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just
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date
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online
, they will misunderstand someone who they are
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dating
.
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Because
their information in
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social
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media
is the tip of
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iceberg and
they won’t know about their background
totally
and
correctly
if they
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have a long distance
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and can’t
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them
directly
owing to
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work
. It leads to
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misuderstanding
and lessening care from their partners. To
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, they can’t go immediately and take care of their boyfriends or girlfriends whenever they need most due to
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can
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weaker and break up.
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can
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tricker
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clearly
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easily
and
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hurted
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online.

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some
several elements lead to
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dating
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online
and
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negative
effects of this trend has serious result for
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people’
life. If
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people
still
continue
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dating
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, they will have
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consequences and are difficult to have a long
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relationship
.
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IELTS essay Dating online seems to be increasingly widespread concern

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
581 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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