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D/A To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success.

D/A To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success. n6xlo
It is well known that failure is always followed by success, just like the thunder is always followed by the rainbow. Therefore, if we lack courage and optimism to dispel the thick clouds of the failure, we never have chance to bathe in the sunshine of the success. From my perspective, optimism in the failure matters more than that in the success, because it is the force that motivates you to keep going. My arguments for this point are listed as follows. First of all, optimism is a key that turns the failure into success. It is well known that failure is the mother of success. However, not. . .
It is well known that
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failure
is always followed by
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,
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just
like the thunder is always followed by the rainbow.
Therefore
, if we lack courage and optimism to dispel the thick clouds of the
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failure
, we never have chance to bathe in the sunshine of the
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success
. From my perspective, optimism in the
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failure
matters more than that in the
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success
,
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because
it is the force that motivates you to
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keep
going. My arguments for this point
are listed
as follows.

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First of all
, optimism is a key that turns the
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failure
into
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success
. It is well known that
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failure
is the mother of
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success
.
However
, not.
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IELTS essay D/A To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
110 words
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