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Customers know that there are different types of salespeople. Some salespeople are successful and others are not. Write a comparison-contrast essay about two salespeople who have influenced your purchasing decision.

Customers know that there are different types of salespeople. Some salespeople are successful and others are not. Write a comparison-contrast essay about two salespeople who have influenced your purchasing decision. o66m9
In today’s fast-paced life, being salespeople has been a really standardized job which requires a variety of dealing skill which could persuade customers. For me, only when a trader meets my yardstick of a deep insight into the product being marketed and professional, enthusiastic dealing skills am I convinced to buy his product. That was also the case when I was on my way to buy a new phone. Due to the differences in selling of two sale reps, I had to come into two shops to make the decision. At the first shop, I met a promotion girl who was supposed to successfully win upon me buying her device, but she failed because of her lack of knowledge and unwelcoming attitude. When I first stepped into the shop, a welcoming smile was not on her face. It seemed like she didn’t want to meet any customer that time, which made me wonder what she went to work for. That was a terrible impression but I decided to keep sitting down to ask for information about smartphone types and pick my most suitable one. What I expected was a marketer who could tell me what chipset does the smartphone have, so that I could estimate whether the smartphone meets my demand of configuration. Surprisingly, she could not. She answered very generally and did not point out the name of the chipset. I did not receive my information in need but got her under mood face instead, as a result, left the shop without any purchasing. At the next shop, I got greeting from a gentle male trader who was completely opposite to the first one. He smiled and gave me a warm reception which was truly a pleasant impression to me. In addition, he showed me his deep insight in technology by showing me many types of smartphones and introducing me thoroughly about those phone’s features including remarkable functions and chipsets. Moreover, his professional skill showed up as he enthusiastically recommended me the most appropriate model for my demand. This is the point, being wholehearted is not enough for a dealer. A wise seller knows how to fit in customer’s position to suggest the best for them. Owing to the satisfaction he brought to me, I made my mind up to buy his device without any hesitation. To sum up, It can be clearly seen that proficient and well-behaved sellers are more like to achieve buyer’s esteem. An intelligent dealer is the one who can prevail people to buy his products by a severe knowledge and show them solutions for their needs, not insisting clients on buying anything.
In
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today
’s
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fast
-paced life, being salespeople has been a
really
standardized job which requires a variety of dealing
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
which could persuade customers. For me,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
when a trader meets my yardstick of a deep insight into the product
being marketed
and professional, enthusiastic dealing
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skills
am I convinced to
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buy
his product. That was
also
the case when I was on my way to
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buy
a new phone. Due to the differences in selling of two sale reps, I had to
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come
into two
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shops
to
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make
the decision.

At the
first
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shop
, I met a promotion girl
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who
was supposed
to
successfully
win upon me buying her device,
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but
she failed
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because
of her lack of knowledge and unwelcoming attitude. When I
first
stepped into the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
, a welcoming smile was not on her face. It seemed like she didn’t want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
any customer that time, which made me wonder what she went to work for. That was a terrible impression
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
I decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
sitting down to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
information about smartphone types and pick my most suitable one. What I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
was a marketer
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who
could
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tell
me what chipset does the smartphone have,
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so
that I could estimate whether the smartphone meets my demand of configuration.
Surprisingly
, she could not. She answered
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
generally
and did not point out the name of the chipset.

I did not receive my information in need
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but
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got
her under mood face
instead
,
as a result
,
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left
the
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shop
without any purchasing.

At the
next
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shop
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
greeting from a gentle male trader
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who
was completely opposite to the
first
one. He smiled and gave me a warm reception which was
truly
a pleasant impression to me.
In addition
, he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
me his deep insight in technology by showing me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
types of smartphones and introducing me
thoroughly
about those phone’s features including remarkable functions and chipsets.
Moreover
, his professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
showed
up as he
enthusiastically
recommended me the most appropriate model for my demand. This is the point,
being wholehearted
is not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
for a dealer. A wise seller knows how to fit in customer’s position to suggest the best for them. Owing to the satisfaction he brought to me, I made my mind up to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
his device without any hesitation.

To sum up, It can be
clearly
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
that proficient and well-behaved sellers are more like to achieve buyer’s esteem. An intelligent dealer is the one
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
can prevail
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
buy
his products by a severe knowledge and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
them solutions for their needs, not insisting clients on buying anything.
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IELTS essay Customers know that there are different types of salespeople. Some salespeople are successful and others are not. Write a comparison-contrast essay about two salespeople who have influenced your purchasing decision.

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5 paragraphs
438 words
6.0
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