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Entertainers play equally significant role in society as the scientist do

Entertainers play equally significant role in society as the scientist do PWW2d

It is argued that better actors play and equally significant role in society as scientist play; moreover, I completely supports this view because it remove tension and increase the demand of inventions which are discussed ahead. The first and foremost reason is, it help to forget stress and live happy. To elaborate, nowadays every person lead a hectic life due to work; as a result, they seems to be tensed everytime, and they do not take sound sleep. However, if people view the artists who are entertaining, then they feel fresh and anxiety will go far away. To illustrate, father of my friend always live with tensions and stress, but after watching the entertainers he live life without worries. Thus, performers play an essential role in life. Secondly, if celebrities are present then only the people buy gadgets. To explicate, artists made the use of labour free devices because they make films and shows which comes on these gadgets, and seen by the people. If entertainers stop working then very few person will use these devices. For instance, headline of newspaper Times of India revealed that, more than 70% individuals bought and used TV, mobiles, laptops and computers, for watching the programme. Henceforth, these actors increased the demand of technology. In conclusion, owing to reduce worries and growth of scientific inventions. I am convinced the statement that is good entertainers have the same importance in world as the scientist have is logically sound.

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 that better actors play and equally
 significant role in society as scientist play; moreover
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supports
 this view This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it Did you mean "removes"?removes
remove
 tension and increase the demand of inventions which are discussed
 ahead.

The first
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help
 to forget This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accentuate
stress
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 happy. To elaborate, nowadays every person lead a hectic life due to work; as a result
, they The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: "seem"seem
seems
 to be tensed
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everytime
, and they do not take sound sleep. However
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people
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live
 with tensions and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accentuate
stress
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 after watching the entertainers he This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 life without worries. Thus
, performers play an essential role in life.

Secondly
, if celebrities are present then This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchase
buy
 gadgets. To explicate, artists made the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 of Possible spelling mistake. 'labour' is British English.labor
labour
 free devices This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 films and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :demonstratesportraysindicatesdisplays
shows
 which This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :approachesarrives
comes
 on these gadgets, and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witnessed
seen
 by the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
. If entertainers This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :terminateceasediscontinue
stop
 working then This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:extremelyimmenselysupremelysuperb
very
Possible agreement error. The noun person seems to be countable; consider using: "few people", "few persons".few peoplefew persons
few person
 will This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 these devices. For instance
, headline of newspaper Times of India revealed that, more than 70% individuals This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchased
bought
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploited
used
 TV, mobiles, laptops and computers, for watching the Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.program
programme
. Henceforth, these actors increased the demand of technology.

In conclusion
, owing to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :alleviate
reduce
 worries and growth of scientific inventions. I am convinced
 the statement that is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 entertainers have the same importance in world as the scientist have is logically
 sound. 