Search
Vocabularying
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

critically evaluate whether the cause of deliquent behavior in teenagers is mainly genetic or environmmental. Analyze the effects this behavior has on society

critically evaluate whether the cause of deliquent behavior in teenagers is mainly genetic or environmmental. Analyze the effects this behavior has on society 6xogW

It can be argued that the crime rate in teenagers nowadays is increasing rapidly. Some of the major culprits of this problem and the effect on society will be discussed in this essay. First of all, the delinquent behavior in teenagers can be caused by genetic. This is because everybody is inherited genes from the former generation so their attitude also will be influenced. For example, a recent research by the Cambridge University found that the number of youngsters committed a crime like their father were higher than the others whose fathers had non-criminal. That’s why parents’ characters always have a necessary part of children’s life. Second, environmental effects create a violent culture for teenagers. In other words, it is undoubted that upbringing plays an integral role in the improvement of abusive tendencies. People who live in bad neighborhoods for a long time can vulnerable to engage in illegal activities and become potential criminals. The high rate of youth crimes is posing a serious threat to society. Firstly, society can be unsafe because of deviant behaviors. As a consequent, people lack security and they have to be more vigilant. Secondly, wrongdoing in youngsters is detrimental to the development of the economy. In addition, juvenile crimes also exert a negative impact on family relationships. Because of their guilty children, many parents always have altercations and even divorce. As the result, the battle between human is an unavoidable activity that the government have to face up with. In conclusion, I still believe that the causes of living environment outweighs the reason stems from genetic. I highly recommend that both society and parents should pay more attention to their own children to evade the intergenerational deviance problem.

It can be argued
 that the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcaselawlessnessviolationfelonymisdemeanorinfraction
crime
 rate in This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
 nowadays is increasing rapidly
. If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?Some
Some of the
 major culprits of this problem and the effect on You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
 will be discussed
 in this essay.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, the delinquent behavior in This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
 can be caused
 by genetic. This is This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 everybody is inherited
 genes from the former generation This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 their attitude also
 will be influenced
. For example
, a recent research by the Cambridge University found that the number of youngsters committed a You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcaselawlessnessviolationfelonymisdemeanorinfraction
crime
 like their father were higher than the others whose fathers had non-criminal. That’s why parents’ characters always have a necessary part of children’s life. Second, environmental effects create a violent culture for This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :juvenilesadolescents
teenagers
. In other words
, it is undoubted
 that upbringing plays an integral role in the improvement of abusive tendencies. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
People
 who This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reside
live
 in This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
 neighborhoods for a long time can vulnerable to engage in illegal activities and become potential criminals.

The high rate of youth You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcaselawlessnessviolationfelonymisdemeanorinfraction
crimes
 is posing a serious threat to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
. Firstly
, You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
 can be unsafe This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 of deviant behaviors. As a consequent, This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 lack Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).security, and
security and
 they This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 be more vigilant. Secondly
, wrongdoing in youngsters is detrimental to the development of the economy. In addition
, juvenile You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcaselawlessnessviolationfelonymisdemeanorinfraction
crimes
also
 exert a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:adverse
negative
 impact on family relationships. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
Because
 of their guilty children, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
many
 parents always have altercations and even divorce. As the result, the battle between human is an unavoidable activity that the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :national authoritypublic authority
government
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:ought to
have to
 face up with.

In conclusion
, I still
 believe that the causes of living environment outweighs the reason stems from genetic. I highly
 recommend that both You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcompanyhumanitycommunitynationculturecivilization
society
 and parents should pay more attention to their This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
 children to evade the intergenerational deviance problem. 