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Criminals relapse their mistake after getting free from prison

Criminals relapse their mistake after getting free from prison KGyR9
These days the number of criminals are proliferting at an alarming rate. According to many studies a large number of offenders tend to commit more crimes after they are released from prison. This essay will disccuss the reasons why this is the case of and bring out the measure ti tackle this issue. To begin with, there exist some reasons why ex-convicts tend to relapse more offences. First of all, almost criminals can not control mind before such temptations of lives such as money or jewelry which lead to many bad situations as theft or aggressive-homicidal. Therefore this is the host reason why offenders easily commit their fault. Furthermore, a person who be set free from prison are always slighted and discriminated by citizen and society. As a consequence they can not seek for job opportunities and have no chance to start again with a clean slate. For instance, an ex- criminal after being released and applies to enterprise for job. The recruiter will deny his application for occupation since criminals are always a threat to company although he has an intellectual faculties so criminals easily relapse crimes again to earn money in order to survive in hard lives There are several ways which Government and Ministry of Public Security had better do to tackle this problem. Firstly, Ministry of Public Security should tighten offenders ' relationship to minimize the risk of reoffences. For example, a former criminal just get out of prison and is unemployed, a bad organization is a terrible temptation for offender. They do not have money or job so they have to do everything to earn money for lives including theft. Secondly, Government should promote building some employment centers which are intended for wrongdoers after released. As a result, they can get job rapidly to earn money and survive in lives. Moreover, i think that most individual should not discriminate with criminals when they are set free. People had better live In harmony with each other so as to ex-convicts can have a chance to share emotions and restart lives with a clean slate. Hence citizen and society will be safer than ever before. In conclusion, government and each individuals should Co-ordinate with each other to minimize a number of criminals who relapse crimes again and not to discriminate completely against in lives
These days the number of
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criminals
are
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proliferting
at an alarming rate. According to
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many
studies
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a large number of
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offenders
tend to commit more crimes after they
are released
from prison. This essay will
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disccuss
the reasons why this is the case of and bring out the measure ti tackle this issue. To
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begin
with, there exist
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some
reasons why ex-convicts tend to relapse more
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offences
.
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First of all
, almost
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criminals
can not control mind
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before
such temptations of
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lives
such as
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money
or jewelry which lead to
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many
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bad
situations as theft or aggressive-homicidal.
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Therefore
this is the host reason why
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offenders
easily
commit their fault.
Furthermore
, a person who
be set
free from prison are always slighted and discriminated by citizen and society. As a consequence they can not seek for
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job
opportunities and have no chance to
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start
again with a clean slate.
For instance
, an ex-
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criminal
after
being released
and
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applies to
enterprise for
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job
. The recruiter will deny his application for occupation since
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criminals
are always a threat to
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company
although he has an intellectual faculties
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so
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criminals
easily
relapse crimes again to earn
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money
in order to survive in
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hard
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lives
There are several ways which
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Government
and Ministry of Public Security had better do to tackle this problem.
Firstly
, Ministry of Public Security should tighten
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offenders
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'
relationship to minimize the
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risk
of
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reoffences
.
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, a former
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criminal
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just
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get
out of prison and
is unemployed
, a
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bad
organization is a terrible temptation for
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offender
. They do not have
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money
or
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job
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so
they
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have to
do everything to earn
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money
for
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lives
including theft.
Secondly
,
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Government
should promote building
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some
employment centers which
are intended
for wrongdoers after released.
As a result
, they can
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get
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job
rapidly
to earn
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money
and survive in
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lives
.
Moreover
,
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i
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think
that most individual should not discriminate with
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criminals
when they
are set
free.
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People
had better
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live
In harmony with each other
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so as to
ex-convicts can have a chance to share emotions and restart
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lives
with a clean slate.
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Hence
citizen and society will be safer than ever
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before
.
In conclusion
,
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government
and each
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individuals
should Co-ordinate with each other to minimize a number of
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criminals
who relapse crimes again and not to discriminate completely against in
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lives
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IELTS essay Criminals relapse their mistake after getting free from prison

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
386 words
5.5
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