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Criminal sent to the prison is not effective way of dealing with them. Education and training should be imparted instead do you agree or disagree?

Criminal sent to the prison is not effective way of dealing with them. Education and training should be imparted instead QMwOw
In the current era, crime rate goes up a birthday all over the world. many people reckon that sending in prison is not effective way to tackle criminal. Instead of this it is beneficial to educate them according to some group of thinkers. I partially agree with the view and my further inclination is justified in the following paragraph. On the first hand, it is essential for criminals to send reason for any crime. It is the better way to reduce crime ratio and safeguard our society. For instance, a criminal who commit rape then prison realise them about their crime ine take necessary step to overcome it. Punishment for any crime set example for others who have thought of crime. to maintain law and regulation in society criminal must keep in mind the outcomes of the crime. Government should send criminals in prison for citizen live normal life in society. But " every coin have two side" sometimes innocent people suffer and without commit crime they sent to prison due to lack of rules and regulation. Poor and minorities become victim of this kind of situation. Criminal never thought about outcomes in their family pays for them. Activities like prison sometimes lead criminal for revenge motive. On the other hand, best way to deal with criminal is to educate them through rehab centre so they can rectify their errors. Moreover, culprit understand the value of life and good and bad aspects. To educate them by giving job training they become responsible and improve Civic sense. If criminal really want to change themselves then prison education or job training work out financial crisis for them and family as well. According to one survey published in global times at 2019, only 20% criminal take interest on education in job training during prison period. Therefore, agglomerating all the given point it can be reiterated that, government should strength and laws to work and criminal activities but on the other hand they must give second chance to criminals. Authority should strike balance between punishment of prison and try to educate them by offering job training.
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rate goes up a birthday all over the world.
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many
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people
reckon that sending in
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prison
is not
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effective
way to tackle
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.
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of this it is beneficial to
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educate
them according to
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group of thinkers. I
partially
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agree
with the view and my
further
inclination
is justified
in the following paragraph.

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first
hand, it is essential for
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criminals
to
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send
reason for any
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crime
. It is the better way to
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reduce
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crime
ratio and safeguard our society.
For instance
, a
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criminal
who commit rape then
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prison
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realise
them about their
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crime
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ine
take necessary step to overcome it. Punishment for any
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crime
set example for others who have
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thought
of
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crime
.
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to
maintain law and regulation in society
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criminal
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must
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keep
in mind the outcomes of the
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crime
.
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Government
should
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send
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criminals
in
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prison
for citizen
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live
normal life in society.
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every coin have two side
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sometimes
innocent
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people
suffer and without commit
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crime
they
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sent
to
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prison
due to lack of
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rules
and regulation. Poor and minorities become victim of this kind of situation.
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Criminal
never
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thought
about outcomes in their family pays for them. Activities like
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prison
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sometimes
lead
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criminal
for revenge motive.

On the other hand
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way to deal with
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criminal
is to
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educate
them through rehab centre
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so
they can rectify their errors.
Moreover
, culprit understand the value of life and
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good
and
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bad
aspects. To
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educate
them by giving
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job
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training
they become responsible and
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improve
Civic sense. If
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criminal
really
want to
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change
themselves then
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prison
education or
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job
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training
work out financial crisis for them and family
as well
. According to one survey published in global times at 2019,
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only
20%
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criminal
take interest on education in
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job
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training
during
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prison
period.

Therefore
, agglomerating all the
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given
point it can
be reiterated
that,
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government
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should strength
and laws to work and
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criminal
activities
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but
on the other hand
they
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must
give second chance to
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criminals
. Authority should strike balance between punishment of
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prison
and try to
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educate
them by offering
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job
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training
.

IELTS essay Criminal sent to the prison is not effective way of dealing with them. Education and training should be imparted instead

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  American English
4 paragraphs
352 words
6.0
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