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Undoubtedly, with technological advancement, everything has extremely changed

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Undoubtedly, with technological advancement, everything has extremely changed and education is not an exception in this process. A controversial question that has aroused the attention of society is whether it is convenient to be knowledgeable in the modern era? In the response to this question, opinions are varied from one person to another one. A number of experts advocate the statement and many more contradict this matter. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the claim. I will elaborate on my reason in the following paragraphs. To begin with, technology progresses has increased learning efficiency. Nowadays accessing the internet has been pervasive in a way that has made it possible to acquire a sea of information including books, articles, etc. it is only enough to search keywords in Google or other search engines to find numberless matters. in addition, expanding of social platforms has been enabled that professional experts gather around each other in a given channel and sharing information and experience. personal experience is a good example. when beginning to study tax accounting I did not know how to calculate different kinds of taxes. after one year I am professional now because I asked my question from specialists through a channel in telegrams. besides above mentioned, progress in educational facilities and equipment are other reasons that I believe have been effective in learning. with help of technology, teachers use educational tools such as video, Microsoft office, etc that has allowed them to teach visually. hence students can easily imagine theoretical material and consequently understand better academic material. in addition, nowadays universities have increased in numbers so that undergraduates can study even in small towns. hence it is not necessary that individuals to go to other towns or cities as in the past do. furthermore, tutors' quality has extremely increased because they continuously participate in educational courses and share their experiences. put in brief,
Undoubtedly
, with technological advancement, everything has
extremely
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changed
and education is not an exception in this process. A controversial question that has aroused the attention of society is whether it is convenient to be knowledgeable in the modern era? In the response to this question, opinions
are varied
from one person to another one. A number of experts advocate the statement and
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many
more contradict this matter. As far as I
am concerned
, I
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agree
with the claim. I will elaborate on my reason in the following paragraphs.

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begin
with, technology progresses has increased learning efficiency. Nowadays accessing the internet has been pervasive in a way that has made it possible to acquire a sea of information including books, articles, etc. it is
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only
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enough
to search keywords in Google or
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other
search engines to find numberless matters.
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in
addition, expanding of social platforms has
been enabled
that professional experts gather around each
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other
in a
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given
channel and sharing information and experience.
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personal
experience is a
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good
example.
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when
beginning to study tax accounting I did not know how to calculate
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different
kinds of taxes.
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after
one year I am professional
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now
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because
I asked my question from specialists through a channel in telegrams.

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besides
above mentioned, progress in educational facilities and equipment are
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other
reasons that I believe have been effective in learning.
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with
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help
of technology, teachers
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use
educational tools such as video,
Did you mean the proper noun "Microsoft Office" (= Microsoft product)?
Microsoft office
, etc that has
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allowed
them to teach
visually
.
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hence
students can
easily
imagine theoretical material and
consequently
understand better academic material.
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in
addition, nowadays universities have increased in numbers
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so
that undergraduates can study even in
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small
towns.
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hence
it is not necessary that individuals to go to
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other
towns or cities as in the past do.
furthermore
, tutors' quality has
extremely
increased
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because
they
continuously
participate in educational courses and share their experiences.

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put
in brief
,
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IELTS essay Undoubtedly, with technological advancement, everything has extremely changed

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
316 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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