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Crime in Juvenile delicuency

Crime in Juvenile delicuency Ydw6B
Presently, many happen juvenile delinquency. This is because, lack contacts between the children and their parents. Moreover, negative an impact of less communication which close with parents is the children feeling lonely. Nowdays, many people believe that children and their parents less close. This is because, more often children alone or with nannies or babysitters as busy parents, so less contact with their children. In addition, in the past Women at home to cook, clean and look after children. In order to they only job at home because not yet knowledge development compared to now most women choice become carrer women due to change mindset pattern current develop. For example, in 2017, according to research by Dr. Jhonson shown that the children much more keeped by babysistters than their parents because they working along day with labour time approxmately 12 hours per days. That is why, the children more close with nannies. Futhermore, in the past the women demanded for servis their husband. Many people view the hold that juvenile delinquency increase. There is also argument that many parents have no idea as juvenile delinquency by peer pressure as well as some of them join gangs. In addition, lack of communication between children and parents makes children out of control outside the home. An example, in Jakarta, 2018, has reported by Metro Jaya Police that every day recorded one hundared event, and always happened riot more which caused of teenagers such as brawl, drunkenness, theft, and using illegal drugs. As a result, many young people lost in the future. Therefore, the government must made workshop about juvenile delinquency to youth for avoid like that occur. In conclusion, the children that have babysitters from little tend to seldom interaction between parents, due to their more busy at outside home. Consequently, nowadays many young people do juvenile delinquency. Futhermore, parents should divide the time and often communicate with children to find out their complaints.
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children
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parents
is the
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children
feeling lonely.

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Nowdays
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people
believe that
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children
and their
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parents
less close. This is
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, more
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children
alone or with nannies or babysitters as busy
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parents
,
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less contact with their
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children
.
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, in the past
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Women
at home to cook, clean and look after
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children
. In order to they
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only
job at home
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because
not
yet
knowledge development compared to
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now
most
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women
choice become
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carrer
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women
due to
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change
mindset pattern
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current
develop.
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, in 2017, according to research by Dr.
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Jhonson
shown that the
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children
much more
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keeped
by
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babysistters
than their
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parents
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along day with
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time
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approxmately
12 hours per days.
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more close with nannies.
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, in the past the
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women
demanded for
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servis
their husband.

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view the hold that
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increase. There is
also
argument that
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have no
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by peer pressure
as well
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of them
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gangs.
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and
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makes
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children
out of control outside the home. An example, in Jakarta, 2018, has reported by Metro
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Jaya
Police that every day recorded one
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hundared
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such as brawl, drunkenness, theft, and using illegal drugs.
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young
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lost in the future.
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government
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made workshop about
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to youth for avoid like that occur.

In conclusion
, the
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children
that have babysitters from
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tend to seldom interaction between
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parents
, due to their more busy at outside home.
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, nowadays
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young
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do
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.
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parents
should divide the time and
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often
communicate with
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children
to find out their complaints.
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IELTS essay Crime in Juvenile delicuency

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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