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Crime has been increased these days. Do you agree

Crime has been increased these days. Do you agree G3ANm
Day by day, a crime has became more common issue not only in our country but all around the world. From my point of view, government should punish someone according to their commited crime. The last ten years a crime has been increased around the world. In order to prevent this government should admit an appropriate punishment. Thus, some people says that a crime should have unchangeable punishment. If any kind of crime has a fixed punishment, people may not offend it again as they know the consequences of it. However, a fixed punishment for a crime might not be a right way to judge. As far as, some people would not mind to kill someone. Another reason is just they would become a victim of the accident. For example, a man raped a woman. In order to protect herself that woman killed him by accident. Due to woman shouldn’t be judged so strict as self-protection isn’t considered to be a crime. All in all, I agree with the statement that someone should be punished taking the consequencess of the crime into account. government should admit a right judgment for all of the prisoners depending on their commited crimes.
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crime
has
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more common issue not
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in our country
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all around the world. From my point of view,
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government
should punish someone according to their
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crime.

The last ten years a
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has
been increased
around the world. In order to
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prevent
this
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government
should admit an appropriate
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,
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says
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crime
should have unchangeable
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. If any kind of
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has a
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fixed
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punishment
,
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may not offend it again as they know the consequences of it.

However
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for a
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might not be a right way to judge. As far as,
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someone. Another reason is
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they would become a victim of the accident.
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man
raped a woman. In order to protect herself that woman killed him by accident. Due to woman shouldn’t
be judged
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strict as self-protection isn’t considered to be a crime.

All in all, I
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taking the
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consequencess
of the
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into account.
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government
should admit a right judgment for
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prisoners depending on their
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IELTS essay Crime has been increased these days. Do you agree

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