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Some people prefer one-on-one lessons, while others prefer groups. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some people prefer one-on-one lessons, while others prefer groups. Ln5V
It is often seen that many individuals have different selection choices available to gain education. While some argue that personal coaching is the best, other believe that group coaching is the good choice. I will discuss both these views and followed by my opinion. On the one hand, there various reasons for people who chooses one-on-one classes. Firstly, many mankind accepts that personal attention of mentor is very beneficial factor for the student. Owing to that reason, professor finds mistakes of student easily. And serve knowledge based on student’s ability like, tutor teaches more if student is weak in his or her academic. Secondly, it is often noticed that teacher finishes student’s course in a very less time because of no any other disturbance. Due to that reason, student get much time to prepare well for that subject. On the other hand, I strongly believe that group education is more beneficial. The first and for most reason of batch lessons is that student can get different views and ideas of others. Also, they can get opportunity to discuss in between to know more about their ideas regarding to the lessons. Hence, they can increase their knowledge and expand their horizons. Another reason for attending classes in set of students is that, they can learn team spirit, by understanding in between. Many people of society believes that group education can enhance student’s communication skills. To sum up, it seems to me that it is a better choice to attend classes in batch, because of several reasons. Such as, they can increase their skills by sharing their views and ideas and team spirit by understanding each other’s perspective.
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individuals have
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selection choices available to gain education. While
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argue that personal coaching is the best,
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believe that group coaching is the
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choice. I will discuss both these views and followed by my opinion.

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reasons
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chooses
one-on-one classes.
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,
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many mankind
accepts that personal attention of mentor is
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beneficial factor for the
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student
. Owing to that
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reason
, professor finds mistakes of
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student
easily
. And serve knowledge based on
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student’s
ability like, tutor teaches more if
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student
is weak in
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his or her
academic.
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, it is
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noticed that teacher finishes
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student’s
course in a
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less time
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of
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any
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disturbance. Due to that
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,
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student
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get
much time to prepare well for that subject.

On the
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hand, I
strongly
believe that group education is more beneficial. The
first
and for most
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reason
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student
can
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views and
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opportunity to discuss in between to know more about their
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ideas
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regarding to
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, they can increase their knowledge and expand their horizons. Another
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reason
for attending classes in set of
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students
is that, they can learn team spirit, by understanding in between.
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people
of society
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believes
that group education can enhance
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student’s
communication
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skills
.

To sum up, it seems to me that it is a better choice to attend classes in batch,
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of several
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. Such as, they can increase their
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skills
by sharing their views and
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ideas
and team spirit by understanding each
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other’s
perspective.
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IELTS essay Some people prefer one-on-one lessons, while others prefer groups.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
5.5
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