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Countries and Culture: Forced actions towards women Africa & South Asia

Countries and Culture: Forced actions towards women Africa & South Asia x2nWo
In this essay, I will talk about all the actions against women that affect them day by day, not only physically but also emotionally, for example, forbidden education. Women have to face barriers every day that prevent them from having the education they deserve, this happens very frequently because of regional customs, traditions, religious beliefs, values ​​or even just because there are still people who believe that women are inferior to men. Lots of females are humiliated, denigrated and forced against their will, sadly this is more common in Africa and South Asia, where this type of actions are seen as “normal” Why does this happen, Only for being women? Africa is the only continent with a treaty committed solely to women´s rights. Despite the laws and the right to education, women have to face mistreatment of any kind, from family prohibition to even death. A well-known case, Malala Yousafzai, was shot on her head because of trying to go to school; in fact, the international community has recognized the equal right for everyone´s quality education and committed to achieving gender equality in all fields. Another issue is forced or arranged marriage, which is very common in the Middle East, Latin America, South Asia and Europe, child marriage is a global problem that cuts across countries, cultures, religions and ethnicities. In these forced marriages, women have no opinion nor voice or vote; it is estimated that more than 700 million women and girls are in a forced marriage, this type of marriage is compared as another form of slavery; another ill, are the forced actions against women since more than 40. 3 million women live in modern enslavement, in which they are exploited in domestic work, construction or agriculture, in addition to 4. 8 million people in forced sexual exploitation. Another type of forced action is the FGM (Female Genital Mutilation), which is the removal of the genital organs for non-medical reasons; this is quite common for several reasons, it reflects a deep inequality and constitutes an extreme form of discrimination against women. This act goes against many laws, such as the violation of the rights of children since this procedure is carried out between childhood and 15 years of age, this is also considered an honour crimes, when the family do this FGM thinking that they are preserving the honour of their families and that their daughter is ready to get married, if this is not carried out, the girl is considered to be impure, and the family does not want to take care of her, being considered as useless, and worst of all the women themselves trust this exploit. In my personal opinion, there is less equality in women, every time we raise our voices to fight for women who do not have a voice; this type of issue, no matter how controversial or complicated they are, must be known and must fight for those women who cannot fight for themselves. Leaving aside religious beliefs, traditions, ethnic roots, or gender, but to do this for the simple fact of fighting for basic human rights, this must be eradicated as soon as possible, these types of actions should be taught as corrupt since school to effectuate a culture and education of respect for both genders.
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women
that affect them day by day, not
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only
physically
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but
also
emotionally
,
for example
, forbidden
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education
.
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Women
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have to
face barriers every day that
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prevent
them from having the
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education
they deserve, this happens
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very
frequently
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because
of regional customs, traditions, religious beliefs, values ​​or even
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just
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because
there are
still
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people
who believe that
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women
are inferior to
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men
. Lots of females
are humiliated
, denigrated and
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forced
against their will,
sadly
this is more common in Africa and South Asia, where this
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type
of actions are
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seen
as “normal” Why does this happen,
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Only
for being women?

Africa is the
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only
continent with a treaty committed
solely
to
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women´s
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rights
. Despite the laws and the
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right
to
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education
,
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women
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have to
face mistreatment of any kind, from
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family
prohibition to even death. A well-known case, Malala Yousafzai,
was shot
on her head
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because
of trying to go to school; in fact, the international community has recognized the equal
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right
for
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everyone´s
quality
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education
and committed to achieving gender equality in all fields.

Another issue is
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forced
or arranged
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marriage
, which is
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very
common in the Middle East, Latin America, South Asia and Europe, child
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marriage
is a global problem that
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cuts
across countries, cultures, religions and ethnicities. In these
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forced
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marriages
,
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women
have no opinion nor voice or vote; it
is estimated
that more than 700 million
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women
and girls are in a
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forced
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marriage
, this
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type
of
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marriage
is compared
as another form of slavery; another ill, are the
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forced
actions against
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women
since more than 40. 3 million
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women
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live
in modern enslavement, in which they
are exploited
in domestic work, construction or agriculture,
in addition
to 4. 8 million
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people
in
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forced
sexual exploitation.

Another
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type
of
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forced
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action
is the FGM (Female Genital Mutilation), which is the removal of the genital organs for non-medical reasons; this is quite common for several reasons, it reflects a deep inequality and constitutes an extreme form of discrimination against
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women
. This act goes against
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many
laws, such as the violation of the
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rights
of children since this procedure
is carried
out between childhood and 15 years of age, this is
also
considered an
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honour
crimes, when the
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family
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do
this FGM thinking that they are preserving the
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honour
of their
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families
and that their daughter is ready to
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get
married, if this is not carried out, the girl
is considered
to be impure, and the
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family
does not want to take care of her,
being considered
as useless, and worst of all the
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women
themselves trust this exploit.

In my personal opinion, there is less equality in
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women
, every time we raise our voices to fight for
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women
who do not have a voice; this
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type
of issue, no matter how controversial or complicated they are,
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must
be known
and
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must
fight for those
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women
who cannot fight for themselves. Leaving aside religious beliefs, traditions, ethnic roots, or gender,
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but
to do this for the simple fact of fighting for basic human
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rights
, this
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must
be eradicated
as
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soon
as possible, these
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types
of actions should
be taught
as corrupt since school to effectuate a culture and
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education
of respect for both genders.
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IELTS essay Countries and Culture: Forced actions towards women Africa & South Asia

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