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Are famous treated unfairly

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Being a famous celebrity means life is full of glitz and glamour as celebrities become centre of attention and usually hog the limelight as the paparazzi is always after them and they want a glimpse of their lives of how they became a successful and their take on budding superstars who are yet to establish themselves on the big stage. As discussed above although being a famous celebrity does bring fame, stardom and glamour it is not always the same as there is a famous proverb 'All that glitters is not gold'. Being a celebrity means they are always surrounded by the paparazzi and at times they may draw undue attention from different sections of society for not only their physical apperance but their ideology. It is not only limited to their physical apperance and ideologies but their interaction with other co-stars. A lot is also written about their controversies or public spat with other actors as being a celebrity is not that easy and everyday new gossips emerge about their rumored relationships and alleged affairs with co-stars. At times media treats famous people inappropriately because of their dark past, alleged linkups with other co-stars and it does become a pressing issue because they are not allowed to be on their own. With the advent of social media even a rumoured relationship spreads like a wildfire and it may not be true everytime. Many famous people do go through a prolonged slump in their personal lives which might affect their growing careers. So my only bit of advice to the media would be to treat them on par with normal people as no two people are the same and their privacy should be respected.
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means life is full of glitz and glamour as
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of how they became a successful and their take on budding superstars who are
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big
stage.

As discussed above although being a
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famous
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celebrity
does bring fame, stardom and glamour it is not always the same as there is a
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famous
proverb 'All that glitters is not gold'. Being a
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celebrity
means they are always surrounded by the paparazzi and at times they may draw undue attention from
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different
sections of society for not
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their physical
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their ideology. It is not
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limited to their physical
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apperance
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their interaction with other co-stars. A lot is
also
written about their controversies or public spat with other actors as being a
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is not that easy and everyday new gossips emerge about their rumored relationships and alleged affairs with co-stars.

At times media treats
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inappropriately
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. With the advent of social media even a
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relationship spreads like a wildfire and it may not be true
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everytime
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famous
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people
do go through a prolonged slump in their personal
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lives
which might affect their growing careers.
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my
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bit of advice to the media would be to treat them on par with normal
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people
as no two
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people
are the same and their privacy should
be respected
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IELTS essay Are famous treated unfairly

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