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Convincing children that hard work makes everything possible is popular in some countries. There are some pros and cons to this message.

Convincing children that hard work makes everything possible is popular in some countries. There are some pros and cons to this message. 73opY

Convincing children that hard work makes everything possible is popular in some countries. There are some pros and cons to this message. Which I will examine in this further essay. On the one hand, this message is beneficial to the brood in many ways, especially to motivate the children keeping up their passions. It pushes them to serve the best version of themselves by means of working hard. For instance, the case about my nephew when he tried apply the best university with scholarship in overseas. In the first time, he become less-self confidence, so his mother encouraged him with this quotes indeed. Then it was effective an increased his confidence and push his selves to study hard. Finally he become successful and obtaining scholarship in the university. On the other hand, children who believe this message may encounter negative impact. They will be frustrated when they did not get the desired result when they set they goals with unrealistic thing. For example, based of my experience, when I was child, I truly believed this message, for these message not only came from my mother, but came also from my teacher. Subsequently, I tried to drive my self to be what I want, like be an astronaut. In every time that a moment, I was study hard and doing exercised in three times everyday for apply at NASA. However, I have unsuccessful at that time, and became depression in one year. In conclusion, although it is beneficial to tell children that working hard can boost a goal, it also can push down the children to be frustrations when they set their goal with non representational faculty.

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