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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion v.4

Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation with this opinion v. 4
Over the past one decade, food habits have changed significantly. Today, we have numerous options available to eat. Convenience food has definitely taken over the pace against traditional food. Some argue that convenience food will become so prevalent that traditional food and its ways of preparation will slowly fade away. However, in my opinion traditional food is going to stay and will not be supplemented by convenience food. Nowadays, young people and children give their preference to convenience food as it seems to be much more attractive and tasty, thanks to the marketing of multinational food making companies. Even professionals give priority to convenience food as it is easy to prepare and take very less time for preparation. They can even have it on the go, it is very convenient for office goers to pick food from outlets and have it on the move without wasting any time. Some reason that having convenience food helps them fulfill their nutritional requirements as traditional food does not provide balanced nutrition. However, there are lots of disadvantages of having convenience food. They are certainly not going to stay for long and would fade away as time goes by, just like fashion. At the same time, traditional food has some unknown attraction that makes it favorite of various generations. Today lot of media houses have started dedicated channels for food making. Some of the shows are favorites of many people. Popularity of shows, such as ‘Sanjeev Kapoor Food Show’ suggests that there certainly is a huge demand for learning and preparing traditional food. Over few years, there has been a significant change in the views of people about traditional food. People think that having traditional food is the healthier option as compared to convenience food. Many schools have subjects included in their curriculum to make children aware of the benefits of traditional food over convenience food. To summarize, I would say that even though it seems that convenience food will completely replace traditional food, it is going to stay for long time. Traditional food certainly has some legacy behind it, otherwise, why was it people’s favorite for centuries?
Over the past one decade,
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food
habits have
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changed
significantly
.
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Today
, we have numerous options available to eat.
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Convenience
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food
has definitely taken over the pace against
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traditional
food.

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Some
argue that
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convenience
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food
will become
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so
prevalent that
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traditional
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food
and its ways of preparation will
slowly
fade away.
However
, in my opinion
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traditional
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food
is going to stay and will not
be supplemented
by
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convenience
food.

Nowadays, young
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people
and children give their preference to
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convenience
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food
as it seems to be much more attractive and tasty, thanks to the marketing of multinational
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food
making
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companies
. Even professionals give priority to
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convenience
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food
as it is easy to prepare and take
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very
less
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time
for preparation. They can even have it on the go, it is
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very
convenient for office goers to pick
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food
from outlets and have it on the
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move
without wasting any time.

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Some
reason that having
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convenience
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food
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helps
them fulfill their nutritional requirements as
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traditional
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food
does not provide balanced nutrition.
However
, there are lots of disadvantages of having
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convenience
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food
. They are
certainly
not going to stay for long and would fade away as
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time
goes by,
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just
like fashion. At the same
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time
,
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traditional
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food
has
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some
unknown attraction that
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makes
it favorite of various generations.

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Today
lot of media
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houses
have
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started
dedicated channels for
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food
making.
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Some of the
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shows
are favorites of
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many
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people
. Popularity of
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shows
, such as ‘Sanjeev
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Kapoor
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Food
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Show
’ suggests that there
certainly
is a huge demand for learning and preparing
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traditional
food.

Over few years, there has been a significant
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change
in the views of
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people
about
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traditional
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food
.
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People
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think
that having
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traditional
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food
is the healthier option as compared to
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convenience
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food
.
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Many
schools have subjects included in their curriculum to
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make
children aware of the benefits of
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traditional
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food
over
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convenience
food.

To summarize
, I would say that
even though
it seems that
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convenience
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food
will completely replace
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traditional
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food
, it is going to stay for long
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time
.
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Traditional
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food
certainly
has
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some
legacy behind it,
otherwise
, why was it
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people’s
favorite for centuries?
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
52Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation with this opinion v. 4

Essay
  American English
7 paragraphs
354 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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