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Contrary to the popular belief that modern technology has made our life better, it has actually made it worse. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.

Contrary to the popular belief that modern technology has made our life better, it has actually made it worse. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice. EqadB
In today's world, it is very difficult to imagine life without the technology because it takes an active part of in every aspect of life. Many people think that the life has become more easier with technology due to innovations on industry, communication, shopping, healthcare and etc. Their argument is powerful. However, technology actually worsens individuals' life for these two reasons. Firstly, thanks to technology; air, water and noise pollution has increased and due to that there a huge danger for our world which is called "Global Warming". Usage of fossil fuels, microplastics and nuclear energy threatens individuals' physical health every day. For example, if people live near to nuclear centrals, their rate of diagnosed as cancer will increase. Moreover, it adversely affects individuals' mental health as well. For example, lack of oxygen can cause to depression and psychosis. The final reason why technology worsens people's life is that nations' and individuals' data is threatened by hackers' prohibited acts. Most of companies are using online servers for their services or storing their customers' personal data. If a hacker obtains to hack these server, everysingle individuals personal information would be in danger. For example, some hackers obtained to hack Yemeksepeti, which is a company in Turkey, with that they have stolen 20 million people's data. Besides people's data, they can influence services such as healthcare or internet banking in a bad way. Moreover, they can cut these services for hours with just one DDOS attack. All things considered, technology made our lifes tougher for two main reasons. The first reason is that the pollution has increased due to technology and it caused to global warming. The second reason why technology made our life worse is it is a huge threat for nations and individuals data and at the same time for online services.
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life
without the
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technology
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because
it takes an active part of in every aspect of
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life
.
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people
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think
that the
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life
has become
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more easier
with
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technology
due to innovations on industry, communication, shopping, healthcare
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. Their argument is powerful.
However
,
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technology
actually worsens
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individuals'
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life
for these two reasons.

Firstly
, thanks to
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technology
; air, water and noise pollution has increased and due to that there a huge
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danger
for our world which
is called
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"
Global Warming
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"
. Usage of fossil fuels, microplastics and nuclear energy threatens
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individuals'
physical health every day.
For example
, if
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people
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live
near to nuclear centrals, their rate of diagnosed as cancer will increase.
Moreover
, it
adversely
affects
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individuals'
mental health
as well
.
For example
, lack of oxygen can cause to depression and psychosis.

The final
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reason
why
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technology
worsens
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people
's
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life
is that nations' and
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individuals'
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data
is threatened
by hackers' prohibited acts. Most of
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companies
are using online servers for their
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services
or storing their customers' personal
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data
. If a hacker obtains to hack
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these server
,
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everysingle
individuals personal information would be in
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danger
.
For example
,
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some
hackers obtained to hack
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Yemeksepeti
, which is a
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company
in Turkey, with that they have stolen 20 million
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people
's
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data
.
Besides
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's
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data
, they can influence
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services
such as healthcare or internet banking in a
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bad
way.
Moreover
, they can
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cut
these
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services
for hours with
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just
one
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DDOS
attack.

All things considered,
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technology
made our
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lifes
tougher for two main
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reasons
. The
first
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reason
is that the pollution has increased due to
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technology
and it caused to global warming. The second
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reason
why
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technology
made our
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life
worse is it is a huge threat for nations and individuals
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data
and at the same time for online
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services
.
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IELTS essay Contrary to the popular belief that modern technology has made our life better, it has actually made it worse. Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.

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302 words
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