Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies.

Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. y25D
Along with the development of advertisement, more and more effect is brought to consumer attention, one of which is a competition of companies. Personally, I believe that advertisement of contending companies are dangerous for consumers who are encouraged to spend money without thinking. No one could neglect the fact that consumers waste their money on some eye-catching products of companies which are broadcasted on the different way such as television program, and so forth do not need for daily life. This is because many companies promote buyers to use their products and services by disseminating information on marketing campaigns, these companies can gain high profits in advertising commercials. For instance, when viewers watch a movie, they may be attended on slogans which move on the screen represent the benefit of goods. The audience just is affected to spend much money on buying some products, but they aware that there are unnecessary goods. Despite hard to finding method, the government should protect their citizen from harmful advertisements. Hazardously advertising televisions programs, poster all of which inform prohibit goods such as alcohol and cigarette should be restricted, especially teenager. Additionally, customers have to subscribe on necessary introduction as well as cannot buy some strange products. However, parents should adopt their child and protect them from too much exposure to advertising. In conclusion, it is undeniable that influent advertisements become more and more important for human life. Nonetheless, customers waste too much money to obtain some goods and services, and children should be promoted to pay much money
Along with the development of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisement
, more and more effect
is brought
to consumer attention, one of which is a competition of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
.
Personally
, I believe that
The usual collocation for "advertisement" is "for" not "of". Did you mean "advertisement for"?
advertisement of
contending
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
dangerous
for consumers who
are encouraged
to spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
without thinking.

No one could neglect the fact that consumers waste their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
on
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
eye-catching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
which
are broadcasted
on the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
way such as television program, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
forth do not need for daily life. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
promote buyers to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
and services by disseminating information on marketing campaigns, these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
companies
can gain high profits in advertising commercials.
For instance
, when viewers
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
a movie, they may
be attended
on slogans which
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
on the screen represent the benefit of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
. The audience
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
to spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
on buying
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they aware that there are unnecessary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
. Despite
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
hard
to finding method, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should protect their citizen from harmful
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
.
Hazardously
advertising televisions programs, poster all of which inform prohibit
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
such as alcohol and cigarette should
be restricted
,
especially
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenager
.
Additionally
, customers
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
subscribe on necessary introduction
as well
as cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
strange
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
.
However
, parents should adopt their child and protect them from too
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
much
exposure to advertising.

In conclusion
, it is undeniable that
Possible spelling mistake found.
influent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
advertisements
become more and more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
for human life. Nonetheless, customers waste too
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
to obtain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
goods
and services, and children should
be promoted
to pay
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
much
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
What do you think?
  • This is funny writingFunny
  • I love this writingLove
  • This writing has blown my mindWow
  • It made me angryAngry
  • It made me sadSad

IELTS essay Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
254 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts