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Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Discuss both sides of this argument and then give your own opinion.

Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences. Ojm3
There is an ever increasing use of technology, such as tablets and laptops, in the classroom. It is often argued that this is a positive development, whilst others disagree and think it will lead to adverse ramifications. This essay agrees that an increase in technology is beneficial to students and teachers. It is clear that the internet has provided students with access to more information than ever before. Moreover, learners have the ability to research and learn about any subject at the touch of a button. It is therefore agreed that technology is a very worthwhile tool for education. Wikipedia is a prime example, where students can simply type in any keyword and gain access to in-depth knowledge quickly and easily. However, many disagree and feel that technology deprives people of real human interaction. Human interaction teaches people valuable skills such as discourse, debate and empathy. Despite this, human interaction is still possible through the internet and this essay disagrees technology should be dismissed for this reason. For instance, Skype and Facebook make it possible for people to interact in ways that were never before possible. In conclusion, while the benefits of technology, particularly the internet, allow students to tap in to limitless sources of information, some still feel that people should be wary of this new phenomenon and not allow it to curb face to face interaction. However, as long as we are careful to keep in mind the importance of human interaction in education, the educational benefits are clearly positive. (266 words) Task Achievement This is one of the four areas you will be assessed on in the IELTS writing test. Task achievement refers to your ability to address all parts of the question and present a fully developed answer. By following the structure above, we have fully discussed both sides of the argument and given our opinion. This is exactly what the question asked us to do, no more, no less.
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ever increasing
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argued that this is a
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positive
development, whilst others disagree and
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think
it will lead to adverse ramifications. This essay
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agrees
that an increase in
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technology
is beneficial to
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students
and teachers.

It is
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clear
that the internet has provided
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students
with access to more information than ever
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before
.
Moreover
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therefore
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agreed
that
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technology
is a
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very
worthwhile tool for education. Wikipedia is a prime example, where
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students
can
simply
type in any keyword and gain access to in-depth knowledge
quickly
and
easily
.

However
,
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many
disagree and feel that
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technology
deprives
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people
of real
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human
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interaction
.
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Human
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interaction
teaches
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people
valuable
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skills
such as discourse, debate and empathy. Despite this,
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human
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interaction
is
still
possible through the internet and this essay disagrees
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technology
should
be dismissed
for this reason
.
For instance
, Skype and Facebook
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make
it possible for
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people
to interact in ways that were never
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before
possible.

In conclusion
, while the benefits of
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technology
,
particularly
the internet,
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allow
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students
to tap in to limitless sources of information,
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some
still
feel that
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people
should be wary of this new phenomenon and not
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allow
it to curb face to face
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interaction
.
However
, as long as we are careful to
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keep
in mind the importance of
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human
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interaction
in education, the educational benefits are
clearly
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positive
.

(266 words)

Task Achievement

This is one of the four areas you will
be assessed
on in the IELTS writing
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test
.

Task achievement refers to your ability to address all parts of the question and present a
fully
developed answer. By following the structure above, we have
fully
discussed both sides of the argument and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
our opinion. This is exactly what the question asked us to do, no more, no less.
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IELTS essay Computers are being used more and more in education. Some people say that this is a positive trend, while others argue that it is leading to negative consequences.

Essay
  American English
8 paragraphs
324 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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