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computer ownership 2002-2010

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To begin with we can see how in both graphics there are a noticeable steepening. It is obvious that laptops markets and online resources have increase a lot in the past few years. Analyzing the first picture we see how In merely eight years the percentage of computers owners rised from around fifty-five to seventy-five. In less than a decade this numbers have experimented an incredible augmentation. On the other hand, in the picture above we notice a huge difference between educated owners and common users. Besides, if we take a look to the different levels we see that the most balanced group is the postgraduate with a fifteen percent between to years. On the contrary, other groups like first three ones show a bigger gap. To sump up we can collect the idea of a quick evolution in the usage of computers and digital media since the beginning of the education. It is impossible to deny the global digitalization.
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how in both graphics there are a noticeable steepening. It is obvious that laptops markets and online resources have increase a lot in the past few years.

Analyzing the
first
picture we
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how In
merely
eight years the percentage of computers owners
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rised
from around fifty-five to seventy-five. In less than a decade
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this
numbers have experimented an incredible augmentation.

On the other hand
, in the picture above we notice a huge difference between educated owners and common users.
Besides
, if we take a look to the
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different
levels we
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see
that the most balanced group is the postgraduate with a fifteen percent between to years.
On the contrary
, other groups like
first
three ones
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show
a bigger gap.

To sump up we can collect the
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idea
of a quick evolution in the usage of computers and digital media since the beginning of the education. It is impossible to deny the global digitalization.

IELTS essay computer ownership 2002-2010

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
160 words
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4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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