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Computer are an essential feature of modern education. Some people believe that certain subjects, such as mathematics, are better taught using computers. Other, however, think that there are aspects of education in which computer use is inadequate. v.1

Computer are an essential feature of modern education. Some people believe that certain subjects, such as mathematics, are better taught using computers. Other, however, think that there are aspects of education in which computer use is inadequate. v. 1
Global warming is alarming condition which is affecting the environment. Researchers have concluded that due to inability of trapped heat in Greenhouse gases, temperature has escalated. In addition, it is primarily a evident source of pollution in our atmosphere. There is plethora source of global warming. To embark, the colossal surge in the fossil fuel energies, To illustrate, the Industries over two decades has largely increased. Due to which emitted Carbon dioxide traps heat coming to The Earth's surface and not letting it leave the atmosphere. Hence, warmth is rising leading to melting of Glaciers, The rise in Sea level, The major Climate shift and migration of Animals to different locations for their survival. Other causes are use of Air condition at home and offices, deodorants, pollution from motor vehicles, etc. There are various solutions which can be addressed to overcome The global warming issues. Primarily, minimum use of private motor vehicles and maximum utilisation of public transport. For instance, Research was done in year 2007, it claimed, that more the number of personal engine cars more will be global warming and it can be down regulated 20 to 30 percentage just by use of public vehicles. Also, Hydroelectric energies in factories can decrease the pollution. For example, Korea emphasises on Hydroelectric energy and thermal reading is four degree Fahrenheit lower than other countries. To conclude, Issue's like Global warming can be controlled with the help of extra precautions and strict law made. This will decrease Greenhouse gases and temperature will be well regulated.
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Global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
warming
is alarming condition which is affecting the environment. Researchers have concluded that due to inability of trapped heat in Greenhouse gases, temperature has escalated.
In addition
, it is
primarily
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a
evident source of pollution in our atmosphere.

There is plethora source of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
warming
. To embark, the colossal surge in the fossil fuel energies, To illustrate, the Industries over two decades has
largely
increased. Due to which emitted Carbon dioxide traps heat coming to The Earth's surface and not letting it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
the atmosphere.
Hence
, warmth is rising leading to melting of Glaciers, The rise in Sea level, The major Climate shift and migration of Animals to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
locations for their survival. Other causes are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of Air condition at home and offices, deodorants, pollution from motor vehicles, etc.

There are various solutions which can
be addressed
to overcome The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
warming
issues.
Primarily
, minimum
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of private motor vehicles and maximum
Possible spelling mistake. 'utilisation' is British English.
utilisation
of public transport.
For instance
, Research
was done
in year 2007, it claimed, that more the number of personal engine cars more will be
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
warming
and it can be down regulated 20 to 30 percentage
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
by
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of public vehicles.
Also
, Hydroelectric energies in factories can decrease the pollution.
For example
, Korea
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emphasises
on Hydroelectric energy and thermal reading is four degree Fahrenheit lower than other countries.

To conclude
, Issue's like
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Global
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
warming
can
be controlled
with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of extra precautions and strict law made. This will decrease Greenhouse gases and temperature will be well regulated.
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7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Computer are an essential feature of modern education. Some people believe that certain subjects, such as mathematics, are better taught using computers. Other, however, think that there are aspects of education in which computer use is inadequate. v. 1

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  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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