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Computer access can harm young children

Computer access can harm young children WE5g0

Computer access has increased significantly in recent decades. Besides, computer games have attracted a large number of young players. Playing computer games can provide us a sense of fulfillment and make us relaxed, but none of these beneficial benefits are permanent. Playing these games for an extended period of time can cause vision loss and brain-harming, especially young children. For instance, by virtue of addiction to video games, changes in their personalities appear. They will be influenced their subconscious minds and start to act as game characters. They can do things that angainst the morality, even commit a murder.

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 young children. For instance
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