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Compatitive edges and unfair advantages

Compatitive edges and unfair advantages LllDR
Personally, i see the achievers across the world has what so colled( competitive edge ) they have unfair advantages over us, there are lots of factors that play a big role in their live which lead them to there. To me if you were born with silver spoon in your mouth and you had rich perants and you had attended to private high school and you was going to school with cool Richer stuff and you had a wide rang network of people and ones loved and then, after you had graduated from high school your parents insisted that you should have get into appropriate uni due to your socioeconomic status and you are from upper class, imagine you have all of these advantages ،how far the validity of your rank is? In anthor word, it is that affordable or available to every one of us? ? Intuitionally NO no one of us has every aspect of life fully that is totally normal since we are humans being, we have variances, we don't own the same midest or neither the same thinking nor the same finance affairs that exactly what might create and generate the different types of people in every scale or class or aspect of life or work or even of relationship so we all have a completely different various ability or potential in order to face our issues or dilemmas. SOMETIMES i thought i would have the same thing that anyone has own, for example when i had graduated i did not find neither way to get into uni I didn't know way, it is because my ability or am i idiot or it is jut like lottery? ! But back in the day i was committed to studying, i literally was making progress by self i have had intelligent mind but why even though i have had all the mindest ability to complete my path i have not found any solutions for that.
Personally
,
i
see
the achievers across the world has what
so
colled
(
competitive edge
)
they have unfair advantages over us, there are lots of factors that play a
big
role in their
live
which lead them to there.

To me if you
were born
with silver spoon in your mouth and you had rich
perants
and you had attended to private high school and you
was
going to school with cool Richer stuff and you had a wide rang network of
people
and ones
loved
and then, after you had graduated from high school your parents insisted that you should have
get
into appropriate uni due to your socioeconomic status and you are from upper
class
, imagine you have all of these advantages
،how
far the validity of your rank is? In
anthor
word, it is that affordable or available to every one of us? ?
Intuitionally
NO
no one of us has every aspect of life
fully
that is
totally
normal since we are humans being, we have variances, we don't
own
the same
midest
or neither the same thinking nor the same finance affairs that exactly what might create and generate the
different
types of
people
in every scale or
class
or aspect of life or work or even of relationship
so
we all have a completely
different
various ability or potential in order to face our issues or dilemmas.

SOMETIMES
i
thought
i
would have the same thing that anyone has
own
,
for example
when
i
had graduated
i
did
not find neither
way to
get
into uni I didn't know way, it is
because
my ability or am
i
idiot or it is
jut
like lottery? !
But
back in the day
i
was committed
to studying,
i
literally
was making progress by self
i
have had intelligent mind
but
why
even though
i
have had all the
mindest
ability to complete my path
i
have not found any solutions for that.
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IELTS essay Compatitive edges and unfair advantages

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
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