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Comparing the last century and this, one can see that the amount of food consumption has significantly increased and because of that the average life expectancy has raised.

Comparing the last century and this, one can see that the amount of food consumption has significantly increased and because of that the average life expectancy has raised. BJ9a9
Comparing the last century and this, one can see that the amount of food consumption has significantly increased and because of that the average life expectancy has raised. Some countries even specialize on food production and more than a half of their GDPs depend on that. Nonetheless, the majority believes that countries should grow goods only for their population. Furthermore, import it as fewer as possible. I definitely do not agree with this extent. This essay will examine the current statement, will give my opinion and include some shreds of evidence. In order to prove my point of view I will give a clear example. The majority of African countries such as Ethiopia and Kenia concentrate on food production. That is why if Europe had prevented the import of food from there, there would have been seen a tremendous nadir in the economy. This issue is affiliated with the zones where individual plants grow. Also, they can not be produced in cold regions. To emphasize the statement I would say, that diminishing the import of some special goods can be very harmful in the case of the global economy. On the other hand, people used to consume different types of coffees and milks and if governments have stopped importing them, the population would have suffered from some problems like the lack of different kinds of vitamins. Some scientists even say, that if it occurs, the majority will die. In conclusion, unless countries had not stopped the import of various kinds of goods, the whole population will be in safe. In addition, it can cause a huge problem with the economy which also has a dramatic impact on people.
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because
of that the average life expectancy has raised.
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Some
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countries
even specialize on
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food
production and more than a half of their
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GDPs
depend on that. Nonetheless, the majority believes that
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countries
should grow
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goods
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only
for their population.
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,
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import
it as
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as
possible. I definitely do not
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agree
with this extent. This essay will examine the
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current
statement, will give my opinion and include
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some
shreds of evidence.

In order to prove my point of view I will give a
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clear
example. The majority of African
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countries
such as Ethiopia and
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Kenia
concentrate on
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food
production.
That is
why if Europe had
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prevented
the
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import
of
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food
from there, there would have been
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seen
a tremendous nadir in the economy. This issue
is affiliated
with the zones where individual plants grow.
Also
, they can not
be produced
in
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cold
regions. To emphasize the statement I would say, that diminishing the
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import
of
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some
special
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goods
can be
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harmful in the case of the global economy.

On the other hand
,
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people
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used
to consume
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different
types of coffees and milks and if
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governments
have
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stopped
importing them, the population would have suffered from
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some
problems like the lack of
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different
kinds of vitamins.
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Some
scientists even say, that if it occurs, the majority will
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die
.

In conclusion
, unless
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countries
had not
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stopped
the
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import
of various kinds of
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goods
, the whole population will be in safe.
In addition
, it can cause a huge problem with the economy which
also
has a dramatic impact on
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people
.
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IELTS essay Comparing the last century and this, one can see that the amount of food consumption has significantly increased and because of that the average life expectancy has raised.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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