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Companies use advertisements to influence people to buy things sometimes which they don’t need. Give your opinion about this practice?

Companies use advertisements to influence people to buy things sometimes which they don’t need. Give your opinion about this practice? awJkV
In recent years, there has been a colossal upsurge in the trend to see companies spending a lot of money on commercial programs in order to propagate their products. In this essay, I will elaborate advertisements often deceive people by informing incorrect or unknown information about products. At the outset, there is a myriad of reasons why advertising is manipulating the viewers to augment profit. Firstly, the most conspicuous one is that advertisements usually repeat the same message about one product again and again, and consumers tend to believe the message while it is not true. Not only do these show the brighter side of the products, but they also hide negative aspects of the products, thus leading to many unavoidable consequences; for example, there is a billion-dollar market of beauty products, but it hardly makes any change to the skin and body. Therefore, needless to say, all these demerits will have a far-reaching impact on the people, as far as buying the best product in the market is concerned. To embark on this, another pivotal facet of the argument is that endorsements usually use celebrities to advertise products since people believe that celebrities are trustworthy and buy products. Besides, people end up purchasing the endorsed products even if they are not really required. For example, football players influence youngsters and they buy products promoted by their favourite sports star without giving the second thought about the product. Hence, it hardly needs to mention that the negative aspects associated with the advertising keep an individual in a low-level position. From what has been discussed above, it can be concluded the pitfalls brought up by the commercial promotions are indeed too dire to ignore.
In recent years, there has been a colossal upsurge in the trend to
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companies
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a lot of
money on commercial programs in order to propagate their
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products
. In this essay, I will elaborate advertisements
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often
deceive
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people
by informing incorrect or unknown information about products.

At the outset, there is a myriad of reasons why advertising is manipulating the viewers to augment profit.
Firstly
, the most conspicuous one is that advertisements
usually
repeat the same message about one
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product
again and again, and consumers tend to believe the message while it is not true. Not
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only
do these
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show
the brighter side of the
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products
,
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but
they
also
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hide
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negative
aspects of the
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products
,
thus
leading to
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many
unavoidable consequences;
for example
, there is a billion-dollar market of beauty
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products
,
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but
it hardly
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makes
any
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change
to the skin and body.
Therefore
, needless to say, all these demerits will have a far-reaching impact on the
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people
, as far as buying the best
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product
in the market
is concerned
.

To embark on this, another pivotal facet of the argument is that endorsements
usually
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use
celebrities to advertise
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products
since
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people
believe that celebrities are trustworthy and
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buy
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products
.
Besides
,
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people
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end
up purchasing the endorsed
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products
even if they are not
really
required.
For example
, football players influence
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youngsters and
they
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buy
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products
promoted by their
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favourite
sports star without giving the second
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thought
about the
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product
.
Hence
, it hardly needs to mention that the
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negative
aspects associated with the advertising
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keep
an individual in a low-level position.

From what has
been discussed
above, it can
be concluded
the pitfalls brought up by the commercial promotions are
indeed
too dire to
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ignore
.
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IELTS essay Companies use advertisements to influence people to buy things sometimes which they don’t need. Give your opinion about this practice?

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
283 words
7
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