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commercial goods affect the environment (cause-solution)

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It is undeniable that nowadays customer tend to focus on ethical issues, whether their products affect our environment or exploit animal’s habitat. Over the decades, these problem have been pressing issues around the world. Therefore, in the following paragraphs will outlined the causes and recommend some practical solutions. It is true to say that environment helped several companies to produce products at a lower prices. To illustrates, people tend to do illegal cutting wood down in other to sell at a higher cost to the marker force and as a results many animal habitat are destroyed. In addition, many advertising goods in make up are tested on animals such as rabbits and rats, commonly seen in Korea and Japan. Therefore, this action could exploit animal and changes in their food chain. To tackle this problem, there are several things that the government could do. Firstly, the authorities could put up a strict regulation on illegal hunger for their commercial. Secondly, individual could could raise awareness through social media such as TikTok or Facebook. For example, recently on TikTok there has been a controversial topic on protecting rabbits and stop using the product that were tested on animals. In addition people living in India had introduced a movement in which they hug tree and prevented from illegal cutting. To sum up, illegal are causes of environment be exploited and could leads to many more consequences if action is not taken. Thus, it should be combine effort from both government and individual to save our environment for a better future in long run.
It is undeniable that nowadays customer tend to focus on ethical issues, whether their products affect our
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environment
or exploit
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animal’s
habitat. Over the decades,
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these problem
have been pressing issues around the world.
Therefore
, in the following paragraphs will outlined the causes and recommend
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some
practical solutions.

It is true to say that
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environment
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helped
several
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companies
to produce products at a lower prices. To illustrates,
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people
tend to do
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illegal
cutting wood down in other to sell at a higher cost to the marker force and as
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a results
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many
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animal
habitat are
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destroyed
.
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,
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many
advertising
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goods
in
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make
up are
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tested
on
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animals
such as rabbits and rats,
commonly
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seen
in Korea and Japan.
Therefore
, this action could exploit
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animal
and
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changes
in their food chain.

To tackle this problem, there are several things that the
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government
could do.
Firstly
, the authorities could put up a strict regulation on
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illegal
hunger for their commercial.
Secondly
, individual
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could could
raise awareness through social media such as TikTok or Facebook.
For example
, recently on TikTok there has been a controversial topic on protecting rabbits and
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stop
using the product that were
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tested
on
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animals
. In
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addition
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people
living in India had introduced a movement in which they hug tree and
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prevented
from
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illegal
cutting.

To sum up,
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illegal
are causes of
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environment
be exploited
and could
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leads
to
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many
more consequences if action is not taken.
Thus
, it should be combine effort from both
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government
and individual to save our
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environment
for a better future in long run.
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IELTS essay commercial goods affect the environment (cause-solution)

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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