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" College should provide free education to everyone. " Agree or disagree with the statement. v.1

" College should provide free education to everyone. " Agree or disagree with the statement. v. 1 XYeN
Social work makes a person a good human being, so a group of individuals believe that some convicts should not be sent to jail, instead they should do unpaid work at social places. I completely believe that it not only makes them good individuals, but also saves governments' money. To begin with, if certain criminals made to do community work without any money then they can realize their mistakes and have enough time to learn from their misdeeds. Therefore, they will not involve in criminal activities again and become a good human being. Consequently, there will be a reduction in the crime rate in the society. For instance, in the United States of America, the government send the minor crime convicts such as thieves to community centers, to learn from their mistakes so that they do not re-commit the crime. Hence, they become a social person. Moreover, it also saves numerous resources when some criminals sent to do help the people in the social service centers. This is because the government spent huge money to keep the prisoners behind the bars, so this money can be saved and used to invest in various development projects. For example, the Canadian government, according to a research report published in a newspaper, spent more money on education, infrastructure and health sector because they do not waste their resources by sending all the offenders to jail. Thus, it is apparent that it saves a lot of money and can be used to develop the nation. To summarize, according to me, serving without getting any money, make the convicts good individuals and ultimately save the efforts of the government. Social work makes a person a good human being, so a group of individuals believe that some convicts should not be sent to jail, instead they should do unpaid work at social places. I completely believe that it not only makes them good individuals, but also saves governments' money. To begin with, if certain criminals made to do community work without any money then they can realize their mistakes and have enough time to learn from their misdeeds. Therefore, they will not involve in criminal activities again and become a good human being. Consequently, there will be a reduction in the crime rate in the society. For instance, in the United States of America, the government send the minor crime convicts such as thieves to community centers, to learn from their mistakes so that they do not re-commit the crime. Hence, they become a social person. Moreover, it also saves numerous resources when some criminals sent to do help the people in the social service centers. This is because the government spent huge money to keep the prisoners behind the bars, so this money can be saved and used to invest in various development projects. For example, the Canadian government, according to a research report published in a newspaper, spent more money on education, infrastructure and health sector because they do not waste their resources by sending all the offenders to jail. Thus, it is apparent that it saves a lot of money and can be used to develop the nation. To summarize, according to me, serving without getting any money, make the convicts good individuals and ultimately save the efforts of the government.
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work
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makes
a person a
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good
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human
being,
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so
a group of
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individuals
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believe
that
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some
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convicts
should not be
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sent
to
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jail
,
instead
they should do unpaid
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work
at
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places. I completely
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believe
that it not
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only
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makes
them
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good
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individuals
,
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but
also
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saves
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governments
'
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money
. To
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begin
with, if certain
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criminals
made to do
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community
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work
without any
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money
then they can realize their
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mistakes
and have
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enough
time to
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learn
from their misdeeds.
Therefore
, they will not involve in
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criminal
activities again and
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become
a
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good
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human
being.
Consequently
, there will be a reduction in the
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crime
rate in the society.
For instance
, in the United States of America, the
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government
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send
the minor
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crime
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convicts
such as thieves to
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community
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centers
, to
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learn
from their
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mistakes
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so
that they do not re-commit the
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crime
.
Hence
, they
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become
a
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social
person.
Moreover
, it
also
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saves
numerous resources when
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some
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criminals
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sent
to do
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help
the
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people
in the
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social
service
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centers
. This is
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because
the
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government
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spent
huge
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money
to
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keep
the prisoners behind the bars,
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so
this
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money
can
be saved
and
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used
to invest in various development projects.
For example
, the Canadian
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government
,
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according
to a research report published in a newspaper,
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spent
more
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money
on education, infrastructure and health sector
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they do not waste their resources by sending all the offenders to
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jail
.
Thus
, it is apparent that it
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saves
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a lot of
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money
and can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to develop the nation.
To summarize
,
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according
to me, serving without getting any
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money
,
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make
the
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convicts
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good
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individuals
and
ultimately
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save
the efforts of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.

Social
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work
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makes
a person a
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good
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human
being,
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so
a group of
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individuals
Possible agreement error. Did you mean "believes"? (Some collective nouns can be treated as both singular and plural, so 'believe' is not always incorrect.)
believe
that
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
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convicts
should not be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to
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jail
,
instead
they should do unpaid
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work
at
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social
places. I completely
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believe
that it not
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only
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makes
them
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good
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individuals
,
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but
also
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saves
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governments
' money.

To
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begin
with, if certain
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criminals
made to do
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community
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work
without any
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money
then they can realize their
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mistakes
and have
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enough
time to
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learn
from their misdeeds.
Therefore
, they will not involve in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
criminal
activities again and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
become
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
being.
Consequently
, there will be a reduction in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
rate in the society.
For instance
, in the United States of America, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
the minor
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
convicts
such as thieves to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
community
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
centers
, to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learn
from their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
mistakes
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that they do not re-commit the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
crime
.
Hence
, they
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
become
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
person.

Moreover
, it
also
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saves
numerous resources when
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some
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criminals
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to do
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help
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
service
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
centers
. This is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
huge
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the prisoners behind the bars,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
can
be saved
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to invest in various development projects.
For example
, the Canadian
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
according
to a research report published in a newspaper,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
spent
more
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
on education, infrastructure and health sector
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
they do not waste their resources by sending all the offenders to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
jail
.
Thus
, it is apparent that it
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
saves
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
money
and can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to develop the nation.

To summarize
,
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according
to me, serving without getting any
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money
,
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make
the
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convicts
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good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
and
ultimately
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save
the efforts of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
.
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IELTS essay " College should provide free education to everyone. " Agree or disagree with the statement. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
548 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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