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city buses track what do you think

city buses track what do you think Bw6N9
We live in a time when every day, if not every hour, something is being created, for instance, new type of vehicles. And so soon we will see that there is no one behind the wheel of transport. In fact, it means that artificial intelligence will manage cars, buses, trucks. People only will be as passengers. On the one hand, this future has a lot of different advantages. First of all, this is not doubtfully related car accidents because scientists say that On the whole major part of accident occurs due to people. Nowadays, people work a lot and they frequently go to bed late and wake up early. Consequently, it leads to sleep at the wheel while artificial intelligence does not have this problem. Secondly, if car, buses and trucks are driverless, vehicle owners will spend more money on knowledge, self-development. On the other hand, the fact that all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless has also disadvantages. First and foremost, many people whose work related with transport may remain unemployed. It means there will be fewer jobs. Other deficiency, It is complex system and equipment. Basically, employers will spend more money on service such as, fixing, washing and so on. To some up, technology is one of the most essential part of development of society and it is a very strange and complicated thing which has both pros and cons. Still advantages outweigh. But I consider that our generation is not ready for such changes right now because our world and mind are not adopted for this. For example, people are not strongly connected with highest transport technology and manufacturing is not prepared for this. So it means that there is much to strive for.
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live
in a time when every day, if not every hour, something is
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for instance
, new type of vehicles. And
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soon
we will
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that there is no one behind the wheel of transport. In fact, it means that artificial intelligence will manage
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cars
, buses, trucks.
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People
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only
will be as passengers.

On the one hand, this future has
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a lot of
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different
advantages.
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First of all
, this is not
doubtfully
related
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car
accidents
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because
scientists say that
On the whole
major part of accident occurs due to
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people
. Nowadays,
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people
work a
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lot and
they
frequently
go to bed late and wake up early.
Consequently
, it leads to sleep at the wheel while artificial intelligence does not have this problem.
Secondly
, if
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car
, buses and trucks are driverless, vehicle owners will spend more money on knowledge, self-development.

On the other hand
, the fact that all
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cars
, buses and trucks will be driverless has
also
disadvantages.
First
and foremost,
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many
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people
whose work related with transport may remain unemployed. It means there will be fewer jobs. Other deficiency, It is complex system and equipment.
Basically
, employers will spend more money on service such as, fixing, washing and
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so
on.

To
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some
up, technology is one of the most essential part of development of society and it is a
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very
strange and complicated thing which has both pros and cons.
Still
advantages outweigh.
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But
I consider that our generation is not ready for such
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changes
right
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now
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because
our world and mind are not adopted for this.
For example
,
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people
are not
strongly
connected with
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highest
transport technology and manufacturing is not prepared for this.
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So
it means that there is much to strive for.
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IELTS essay city buses track what do you think

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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