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Chocolate production in 3 countries

Chocolate production in 3 countries DaDJE
The picture illustrates how chocolate is produced. Overall, there are 9 steps to produce chocolate. The production start with grow coco tree and ripe red pods, then finishes with inner part pressed and liquid chocolate is produced. The first step begin with grow coco tree and ripe red pods in A. America, Africa, Indonesia. Subsequantly bark removes from pods, then bark removes from pods are fermented are spread in sun to dry. The dry pods are put in large sacks. After that the White cocoa beans transported by train or lorry. The transported pods are delivered to factory. Next step, beans are roasted. The roasted beans are crushed. In addition, outer shell removed. The last step contain with inner part pressed and liquid chocolate are ready for consuming.
The picture illustrates how chocolate
is produced
.

Overall
, there are 9
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steps
to produce chocolate. The production
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start
with grow coco tree and ripe red
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pods
, then finishes with inner part pressed and liquid chocolate
is produced
. The
first
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step
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begin
with grow coco tree and ripe red
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pods
in A. America, Africa, Indonesia.
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Subsequantly
bark removes from
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pods
, then bark removes from
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pods
are fermented
are spread
in sun to dry. The dry
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pods
are put
in large sacks. After that the White cocoa beans transported by train or lorry. The transported
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pods
are delivered
to factory.
Next
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step
, beans
are roasted
. The roasted beans
are crushed
.
In addition
, outer shell removed. The last
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step
contain with inner part pressed and liquid chocolate are ready for consuming.

IELTS essay Chocolate production in 3 countries

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
128 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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