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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Children should only play sports for fun, not in competition or contest.

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It seems to be an indisputable fact that the main reason for children playing sports today is for competition not for fun. Faced with such unreasonable phenomenon, I can’t help wondering is it really for children’s own good? Considering the formation of children’s personality and happiness it brings, I strongly agree with the statement that children should only play sports for fun not competition. The main reason for my propensity is that nothing can match the sports for the happiness it brings. When playing the football games, you are able to show off your shooting ability, scoring f. . .
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IELTS essay Children should only play sports for fun, not in competition or contest.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
100 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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