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Children ore focing rnore pressures nowodoYs from acddemic, socio, and commercial, perspectives. Who are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

Children ore focing rnore pressures nowodoYs from acddemic, socio, and commercial, perspectives. Who are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures? geGO
It is commonly said that today's children are pressurized and are facing harder and harder academic, social and commercial challenges. This essay intends to discuss the causes of these pressures and suggest some measures to alleviate the problem. I believe that children must be shielded from such mounting pressures. There are many academic pressures on children. Today's child is not competing with the child next door, or even of one's town or country. He is competing with the child of the global village. The big planet Earth of yesteryears is a small well-linked global village of today. Parents want their children to excel in every field. They send their children to the best schools, where the school bag is often heavier than the child himself. Even after school hours there are private tuitions. Children don't have time to bloom and bring out their hidden talents. There are also many social and commercial pressures. Socially, the children of today are in a huge dilemma' They want to adopt the global culture, whereas their parents force them to confine themselves to the traditions. This sometimes makes them rebel against the rules laid by their elders. Then, they also face peer pressure, which can be good if their peers are good, and bad if their peers are not disciplined. This peer pressure coupled with the consumerist society of today can lead to a lot of stress and strain on children. They see the latest models of cell phones and other items with their peers and want to buy them. When they are unable to do so, they get stressed. The solutions are not simple. Children have to be handled with great care. Parents should have realistic expectations from their children. They should have a pro-active approach and give time to their children. The biggest onus is on the schools and teachers. They should strive to bring out the best in every child and competition and co-operation should both be taught simultaneously. The aim of competition should not be to win at all cost. Children have to be taught to win with modesty and lose with grace. To summarize, there is no doubt that the children of today are facing so many pressures, but steps should be taken on a war footing to protect their innocent childhood. Otherwise, these pressures will stifle the physical and psychological growth of children.
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are pressurized
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pressures
and suggest
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some
measures to alleviate the problem. I believe that
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children
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from such mounting pressures.

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academic
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next
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of the global village. The
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. Parents want their
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children
to excel in every field. They
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send
their
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children
to the best
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bag is
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heavier than the
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himself.
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hours there are private
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don't have time to bloom and bring out their hidden talents.

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also
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many
social and commercial
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pressures
.
Socially
, the
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children
of
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today
are in a huge dilemma' They want to adopt the global culture, whereas their parents force them to confine themselves to the traditions. This
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sometimes
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makes
them rebel against the
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rules
laid by their elders. Then, they
also
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peer
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pressure
, which can be
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if their
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are
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bad
if their
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peers
are not disciplined. This
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peer
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pressure
coupled with the consumerist society of
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today
can lead to
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a lot of
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stress
and strain on
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children
. They
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see
the latest models of cell phones and other items with their
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peers
and want to
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buy
them. When they are unable to do
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, they
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The solutions are not simple.
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Children
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have to
be handled
with great care. Parents should have realistic expectations from their
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children
. They should have a pro-active approach and give time to their
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children
. The biggest onus is on the
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schools
and teachers. They should strive to bring out the best in every
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child
and competition and co-operation should both
be taught
simultaneously
. The aim of competition should not be to win at all cost.
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Children
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have to
be taught
to win with modesty and lose with grace.

To summarize
, there is no doubt that the
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children
of
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today
are facing
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so
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many
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pressures
,
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but
steps should
be taken
on a war footing to protect their innocent childhood.
Otherwise
, these
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pressures
will stifle the physical and psychological growth of
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children
.
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IELTS essay Children ore focing rnore pressures nowodoYs from acddemic, socio, and commercial, perspectives. Who are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
395 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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