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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement? v.30

Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. v. 30
The issue of the media station contributes to the education has become a controversy in the contemporary society. Despite the educational programs in media devices, children are having a failure in their academics, and this has caused the books to be irreplaceable tools used at the university. Personally, I entirely disagree for several reasons. To embark on, the asserting of visual programs is a quite impressive way to use these days. While the advancement is flourishing by improvements, the utilization of a book is being beneficial for two reasons: pedagogy of reading comprehension and adopting a study habit. First, the central reason behind this is the effectiveness of handling books to read are more likely to foster juvenile intellects. Take, for example; the World Health Organization (WHO) Has surveyed the pupils who were using visual programs on their learnings at the Washington University, and these resulted in a drastic decrease in reading comprehension of the students by 30%; however, the students who used educational handbooks have moved immensely by 50% in their language proficiency. Therefore, books are the most valuable tools in education, and it is still viable nowadays. Furthermore, it should not be forgotten that the habitual readings are used to embrace the educational pattern, so if the students grasped these techniques, they would break the language barrier; moreover, a child who shows perseverance will have an outstanding career in the future. To illustrate, many children were taught about using library books to research because the internet was not bearable at the past time, and many of them were looking triumphant. Thus, it is conclusively clearing that the learning can be taught at its finest when these methods are applied. To conclude, the use of television as the source to educate the children has no impact to enhance the language skills and actually it neglects them to study. Therefore, it is clear that books are incomparable pedagogical tools used to scrutinize the younger ones. After the thorough analysis, it is predicted that the schools will always be using books no matter what the advancement will be tomorrow.
The issue of the media station contributes to the education has become a controversy in the contemporary society. Despite the educational programs in media devices, children are having a failure in their academics, and this has caused the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
to be irreplaceable tools
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
at the university.
Personally
, I
entirely
disagree for several reasons.

To embark on, the asserting of visual programs is a quite impressive way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
these days. While the advancement is flourishing by improvements, the utilization of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
is being beneficial for two reasons: pedagogy of reading comprehension and adopting a study habit.
First
, the central reason behind this is the effectiveness of handling
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
to read are more likely to foster juvenile intellects. Take,
for example
; the World Health Organization
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(WHO)
Has surveyed the pupils
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
who
were using visual programs on their learnings at the Washington University, and these resulted in a drastic decrease in reading comprehension of the students by 30%;
however
, the students
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who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
educational handbooks have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
immensely
by 50% in their language proficiency.
Therefore
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
are the most valuable tools in education, and it is
still
viable nowadays.

Furthermore
, it should not
be forgotten
that the habitual readings are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to embrace the educational pattern,
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so
if the students grasped these techniques, they would break the language barrier;
moreover
, a child
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who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
perseverance will have an outstanding career in the future. To illustrate,
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many
children
were taught
about using library
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books
to research
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
the internet was not bearable at the
Did you mean "pastime"?
past time
, and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
of them were looking triumphant.
Thus
, it is
conclusively
clearing that the learning can
be taught
at its finest when these methods
are applied
.

To conclude
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of television as the source to educate the children has no impact to enhance the language
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and actually it neglects them to study.
Therefore
, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
clear
that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
are incomparable pedagogical tools
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to scrutinize the younger ones. After the thorough analysis, it
is predicted
that the schools will always be using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
books
no matter what the advancement will be tomorrow.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. v. 30

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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