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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement? v.17

Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. v. 17
In present time, technology is getting more and more advance. The Education system is too updated with gizmos, same the other side book reading is a boring activity for children. In present time television is a way of learning; still, other people think that TV cannot take a place of books for learning for that reason why children have less - educated nowadays. I believe that the books are a more essential way of learning rather than a TV set, so I partially agree statement; and reasons of my inclination are elaborated in trailed paragraphs. To embark with, by reading a manual children can develop their reading skill, with the same reading can enhance their knowledge which help them to make good communication and appearing good thought in mind. The handbook helps children to sharpen their memory power and concentration. The copy reading can not only increase fluency in language, but it increases their vocabulary which help them throughout their life. By reading a good study material as they can motivate themselves but they can be a good motivator for others, and develop the ability of a leader. In the other positive view, by reading a history handbook, children can get knowledge about the history and know the value of the culture and tradition. By reading a comic textbook children can get good creative ideas and the lexicon may be freshened up their wisdom. By reading devotional booklet children get good peace of mind, and they know about the religion. I think that Video box is a medium which can be a useful for learning, but it should have certain limitation. There are many educational shows are broadcasting on tv station. Many channels make children about the ongoing scenario of the world and give information about different countries and their details and wildlife overview. But it cannot be negative that after watching of telly is still harmful to the eyes of children. Sometime crime show and action scenes distract their intellect and create negative effects. To cite and example, before a year a local physiology collage makes a general debate on some practical analysis, the difference between a child who watching videos and the children who reading the brochure. The result shows that the children who read more books than watching audio and videos, they have good score in general knowledge and the have good communication skill, they mention that they have good concentration and calm nature. To conclude, television and book both help children to learn, but by reading a book children can many benefits: good memory, sharp mind, good communication skill, good concentration; beside that video has some adverse effect on our body.
In present time, technology is getting more and more advance. The Education system is too updated with gizmos, same the
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. In present time television is a way of
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learning
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that TV cannot take a place of
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books
for
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learning
for that reason why
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children
have less
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educated nowadays. I believe that the
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books
are a more essential way of
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learning
rather
than a TV set,
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so
I
partially
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agree
statement; and reasons of my inclination
are elaborated
in trailed paragraphs.

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reading
a manual
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children
can develop their
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reading
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skill
, with the same
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reading
can enhance their knowledge which
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help
them to
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make
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good
communication and appearing
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good
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thought
in mind. The handbook
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helps
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children
to sharpen their memory power and concentration. The copy
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can not
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only
increase fluency in language,
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it increases their vocabulary which
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help
them throughout their life. By
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reading
a
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good
study material as they can motivate themselves
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but
they can be a
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good
motivator for others, and develop the ability of a leader. In the
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other
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positive
view, by
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reading
a history handbook,
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children
can
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get
knowledge about the history and know the value of the culture and tradition. By
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reading
a comic textbook
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children
can
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get
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good
creative
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ideas
and the lexicon may
be freshened
up their wisdom. By
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reading
devotional booklet
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children
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get
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good
peace of mind, and they know about the religion.

I
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think
that
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Video
box is a medium which can be a useful for
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learning
,
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but
it should have certain limitation. There are
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many
educational
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shows
are broadcasting on
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tv
station.
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channels
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make
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children
about the ongoing scenario of the world and give information about
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different
countries and their
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details
and wildlife overview.
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But
it cannot be
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negative
that after watching of
telly
is
still
harmful to the eyes of
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children
. Sometime crime
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show
and action scenes distract their intellect and create
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negative
effects. To cite and example,
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before
a year a local physiology collage
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makes
a general debate on
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some
practical analysis, the difference between a child who watching
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videos
and the
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children
who
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reading
the brochure. The result
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shows
that the
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children
who read more
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books
than watching audio and
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videos
, they have
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good
score
in general
knowledge and the have
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good
communication
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skill
, they mention that they have
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good
concentration and calm nature.

To conclude
, television and
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book
both
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help
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children
to learn,
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by
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reading
a
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book
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children
can
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benefits:
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memory, sharp mind,
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communication
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skill
,
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concentration; beside that
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has
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adverse effect on our body.
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IELTS essay Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
445 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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