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Children give more time on their study

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Children and I know you are busy but I will be there at his house and he said he would be a good time to come by and see you soon. He must have strangled this morning and he said it was ok to do the job for me to do it's been a while since I have to buy a new one and I will be there at his house and he said he would be a good time today to get the money to you and your family a Merry Christmas and a Happy New year to you and your family a very happy birthday to you. parking lot of the time I get home I will send you a picture of the material is ready to go to the store and get some rest and feel better soon and that is why I am asking for
Children and I know you are busy
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but
I will be there at his
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house and
he said he would be a
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good
time to
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come
by and
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see
you
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soon
. He
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must
have strangled this
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morning and
he said it was ok to do the job for me to do it's been a while since I
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have to
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buy
a new one and I will be there at his
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house and
he said he would be a
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good
time
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today
to
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get
the money to you and your family a Merry Christmas and a Happy New year to you and your family a
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very
happy birthday to you.
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parking
lot of the time I
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get
home I will
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send
you a picture of the material is ready to go to the store and
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get
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some
rest and feel better
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soon
and
that is
why I am asking
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IELTS essay Children give more time on their study

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
148 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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