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Children are generally more successsful in foreign langueages studies tham adults.

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It is believed, that the adults master foreign languages worse than children's skills. I completely agree with this statement and clearly it is true that the children assimilating information better than adults. First of all, I know that children's brains absorb information faster than any average adult's brain. In other words, in childhood time children's brain tuned in to learn and explore everything that they see and plus of that they can imbibe another languages with no problem. As can be expected, people, who know different languages have a good working left hemisphere of the brain. Whereas, adults have a lot of other challenges and can not focusing only on learning languages. For instance, kid can learn everything to certain age and they like sponge absorb all of information regardless of complexity. That is case why children of this age can learn a lot of things than adults. Secondly, most of adults do not have enough time for relaxing or doing what they are keen on, because adults are busy of their career and family's work. To put it more simply, if they started to learn foreign language in this age, as a rule, can not learn certain information because of full of stress and problems. At the end of the end, most of adults throw this venture on a half way, under these circumstances they found it troublesome. As a result, they just waste nervous and half if time. It follows that, childhood time is more convenient to learn foreign languages. Taking everything into consideration, I stand by my opinion, that the children absorb information better than adults, because their brain is new and they don't have any other thoughts.
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, that the
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master foreign
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skills
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clearly
it is true that the children assimilating
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better than adults.

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brains
absorb
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information
faster than any average adult's brain.

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, in childhood time children's
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brain
tuned in to
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learn
and explore everything that they
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see
and plus of that they can imbibe another
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languages
with no problem. As can be
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expected
,
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people
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languages
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working
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left
hemisphere of the
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. Whereas,
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have
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a lot of
other challenges and can not
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on learning
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languages
.
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, kid can
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everything to certain
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age and
they like sponge absorb all of
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regardless of complexity.

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case why children of this age can
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learn
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a lot of
things than adults.

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do not have
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time for relaxing or doing what they are keen on,
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are busy of their career and family's work. To put it more
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, if they
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started
to
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learn
foreign
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language
in this age, as a
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, can not
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information
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, most of
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,
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they found it troublesome.
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waste nervous and half if time.

It follows that, childhood time is more convenient to
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learn
foreign languages.

Taking everything into consideration, I stand by my opinion, that the children absorb
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information
better than
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adults
,
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because
their
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brain
is
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new and
they don't have any other thoughts.
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IELTS essay Children are generally more successsful in foreign langueages studies tham adults.

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