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The given pictoorial representation highlights the information how electricity is produced by hydroelectric dam

The given pictoorial representation highlights the information how electricity is produced by hydroelectric dam 1Vl9M
It is clearly seen that there are three main steps engaged in hydroelectric dam which start from reservoir and end to long distance power lines. To start up there are several steps in hydroelectric dam which is taken to generate electricity by dam first of all the huge of water stored in reservoir and when intake opened then the water through pipe to tribune. Afterthat it is one generator in hydroelectric power which is transferred in power house and the via cables through long distance power lines and remaining water send back in river after all process rotation of water continuous from river to dam
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that there are three main steps engaged in hydroelectric
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dam
which
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start
from reservoir and
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end
to long distance
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power
lines. To
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start
up there are several steps in hydroelectric
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dam
which
is taken
to generate electricity by
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dam
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first of all
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the huge of
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water
stored in reservoir and when intake opened then the
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water
through pipe to tribune.
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Afterthat
it is one generator in hydroelectric
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power
which
is transferred
in
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power
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house
and the via cables through long distance
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power
lines and remaining
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water
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send
back in river
after all
process rotation of
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water
continuous from river to
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dam
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IELTS essay The given pictoorial representation highlights the information how electricity is produced by hydroelectric dam

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  American English
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104 words
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