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Chellage in life i have overcome.

Chellage in life i have overcome. 11L7y
I was in six grade and i had to try out for the middle school basketball team. I was so nervous to try out so my and my friends ask people who had already made the team last year and said "was the tryouts hard". They said "no" so my nervous went down some. I had went home and practice on my shooting, dribbling and more.  When it had came time to go to the game to tryout i got more nervous my friends told me it wasn't hard and i got nothing to worry about. So we started trying out and i was doing good and i notice the coaches kept looking at in a good way so i start trying more. Tryouts had ended and came back to school the next day and the coach told me i made the team and i was so happy! The next year came and it's time for tryouts and this time i wasn't nervous at all and i tried my best and made the team again. It's okay to be nervous just make sure you always try your best at everything.
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notice the coaches
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at all and
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tried my best and made the
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sure you always try your best at everything.
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IELTS essay Chellage in life i have overcome.

Essay
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186 words
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