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The figure illustrates the information of the Hawaiian island chain which is located in the centre of the Pacific ocean. There are various layers of soil in the pacific ocean such as pacific plates, solid dense rock, so on and so forth. To embark on, the process of eruption begins from the bottom of the region, which is approximately 2883 km down. At the top of the solid dense rock, the spume remains static which is also known as 'Hotspot'. Moreover, there is a narrow gap, through which the spume of Magma rise and eventually reach the top of the volcano. After a number of eruptions, the development of the youngest volcano begins. During this process, there is a shifting of the pacific plate, which is at the intensity of 7 to 9 cm per year. The oldest volcano can be as old as 80 m years; which is present in the chain of Hawaiian island. Some of the major islands include the A, the B, the c and the D. Overall, the year taken by the volcano to erupt may be in millions of years, after going through a plethora of changes in the layers of soil.

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 from the bottom of the region, which is approximately 2883 km down. At the top of the solid dense rock, the spume remains static which is also
 known as 'Hotspot'. Moreover
, there is a narrow gap, through which the spume of Magma rise and eventually
 reach the top of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withridgeelevationpilepeakbluffcliff
volcano
. After a number of eruptions, the development of the youngest You use this word too often, consider replacing it withridgeelevationpilepeakbluffcliff
volcano
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year
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volcano
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 major islands include the A, the B, the c and the D.

Overall
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