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Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. with this view? JWR5
It is true that parenting is a huge and remarkable responsibility in all societies. However, I strongly disagree with this point of view and I also believe that all future parents perform their parental duties instinctually without participating in any parenthood courses. In my opinion, compelling prospective parents to participate in parenting classes is impractical. It means that nowadays the majority of future parents are occupied with their jobs or have too busy schedules. As a result, they do not have any extra time to allocating or taking part in such classes. Besides, in today’s world, in many families both mothers and fathers are breadwinners and they usually sacrifice themselves even beyond their responsibilities to afford their children’s needs. For this reason, Participating in parental courses for future parents in order to learn how caring for their children is meaningless and useless for a lot of families. In addition, as well as being impractical, I would argue that training courses for parents are unnecessary. Mother and fathers have been raising and breeding their children without any formal help or official interference for thousands of years. Parents not only do not need any classes for learning to parent but also perform it innately in a better way just by their instinct and consulting other members of family, friends, and neighbours. For example, parents in my country use other experiences and trial and error method to overcome their bad-behaved child perfectly without harming or ruining his personality. In conclusion, while compulsory parenting lessons might seem like a good idea, I believe that this attitude would be unworkable and extremely non-essential.
It is true that parenting is a huge and remarkable responsibility in all societies.
However
, I
strongly
disagree with this point of view and I
also
believe that all future
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
perform their parental duties
instinctually
without participating in any parenthood courses.

In my opinion, compelling prospective
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
to participate in parenting classes is impractical. It means that nowadays the majority of future
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are occupied
with their jobs or have
Did you mean "to"?
too
busy schedules.
As a result
, they do not have any extra time to allocating or taking part in such classes.
Besides
, in
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today
’s world, in
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many
families both mothers and fathers are
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breadwinners and
they
usually
sacrifice themselves even beyond their responsibilities to afford their children’s needs.
For this reason
, Participating in parental courses for future
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parents
in order to learn how caring for their children is meaningless and useless for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
families.

In addition
,
as well
as being impractical, I would argue that training courses for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are unnecessary. Mother and fathers have been raising and breeding their children without any formal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
or official interference for thousands of years.
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Parents
not
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only
do not need any classes for learning to
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parent
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but
also
perform it
innately
in a better way
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just
by their instinct and consulting other members of family, friends, and
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neighbours
.
For example
,
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parents
in my country
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use
other experiences and trial and error method to overcome their
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bad
-behaved child
perfectly
without harming or ruining his personality.

In conclusion
, while compulsory parenting lessons might seem like a
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good
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idea
, I believe that this attitude would be unworkable and
extremely
non-essential.
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IELTS essay Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. with this view?

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