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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v.22

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 22
These days people prefer to live a luxurious life. As a result, many individuals own multiple material things and having an automobile, is one of them, which leads to an increase in traffic congestion around the globe. This essay completely agrees with the former statement. The below paragraphs will discuss all significant components in detail. First and foremost, one of the major reasons for people buying cars is the easy availability of loans. Most of the multinational banks are ready to give vehicle loans at a low cost interest rate, which attracts the buyers to purchase an automobile. Second, expensive cars are seen as a status symbol in society and hence, many upper middle class purchase branded cars as a status quo. For instance, in India there is a trend to gift a costly vehicle, by a father to his daughter on her wedding day as dowry. However, there are relevant ways to solve increasing car ownership, one of which is charging more interest rates on a loan. If loans are given at a higher rate of interest, then individuals will think twice before buying a car by borrowing a loan. Next, the higher authorities can take steps, such as reducing the fares of local commutes to motivate people to use public transport rather than a personal vehicle. Additionally, the government can ask four wheeler owners to pay higher toll and parking charges, which would make them use the local transport. For example, in Spain the authorities have increased the parking charges to discourage their citizens from using private cars. In conclusion, undoubtedly ownership of private cars has increased at a huge rate because of varied reasons. Corrective measures by the government can surely help in reducing the usage of these vehicles for personal use and encourage individuals to choose public commutes.
These days
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people
prefer to
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live
a luxurious life.
As a result
,
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many
individuals
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own
multiple material things and having an automobile, is one of them, which leads to an increase in traffic congestion around the globe. This essay completely
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agrees
with the former statement. The below paragraphs will discuss all significant components in detail.

First
and foremost, one of the major reasons for
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people
buying
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cars
is the easy availability of
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loans
. Most of the multinational banks are ready to give
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vehicle
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loans
at a low cost interest
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rate
, which attracts the buyers to
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purchase
an automobile. Second, expensive
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cars
are
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seen
as a status symbol in society and
hence
,
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many
upper middle
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class
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purchase
branded
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cars
as a status quo.
For instance
, in India there is a trend to gift a costly
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vehicle
, by a father to his daughter on her wedding day as dowry.

However
, there are relevant ways to solve increasing
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car
ownership, one of which is charging more interest
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rates
on a
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loan
. If
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loans
are
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given
at a higher
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rate
of interest, then individuals will
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think
twice
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before
buying a
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car
by borrowing a
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loan
.
Next
, the higher authorities can take steps, such as reducing the fares of local commutes to motivate
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people
to
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use
public transport
rather
than a personal
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vehicle
.
Additionally
, the
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government
can ask four wheeler owners to pay higher toll and parking charges, which would
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make
them
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use
the local transport.
For example
, in Spain the authorities have increased the parking charges to discourage their citizens from using private cars.

In conclusion
,
undoubtedly
ownership of private
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cars
has increased at a huge
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rate
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because
of varied reasons. Corrective measures by the
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government
can
surely
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help
in reducing the usage of these
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vehicles
for personal
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use
and encourage individuals to choose public commutes.
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IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 22

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
302 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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