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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v.17

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 17
In the modern world, it is argued by some authorities and politicians that using of the car has been increasing dramatically for thirty years and it causes a traffic problem in most of the big cities. I strongly believe this statement and this essay will examine the proofs of and how to tackle this issue. First of all, the population around the world has increased rapidly in the last century, especially after the second world war. However, a huge amount of people has emigrated from rural areas to big cities and it causes overpopulation. Due to lack of infrastructure system, individuals have preferred to have a private car. The number of motor ownership has increased by 300% in the last decade as per the World Bank. For instance, before and after working hours it would be impossible to use a public transportation system since people have to wait around one hour to get into a bus or subway. That is the reason why citizens tend to have an auto even if they are aware of the traffic jam around the city. So, governments have to ask a question themselves that even if many metropolitan cities have a public transportation system, why individuals prefer to use the automobile? When we look at the answer, I believe that governments should take some restriction to prevent an increasing number of car ownership. Firstly, there should be another city tax, which ensures if a car enters the central zone, the owner has to pay a fee. For instance, especially at the time before and after working hours which are likely 8-9 am and 6-7 pm, the fees of bridges, roads, or parking areas have to be increased by governments or municipalities. Moreover, the authorities have to increase the ratio of the investment of the infrastructure projects and guarantee that public transportation is cheaper, faster and most importantly more quality. For instance, if a person could be able to reach its office by subway, there would no need his car. In conclusion, in the light of the information given above, even if there are some proven causes of the people to use their car, it should not be forgotten that if governments raise the quality of public transportation system and set some penalties, citizens would benefit those systems.
In the modern
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is argued
by
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some
authorities and politicians that using of the
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car
has been increasing
dramatically
for thirty years and it causes a traffic problem in most of the
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big
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cities
. I
strongly
believe this statement and this essay will examine the proofs of and how to tackle this issue.

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First of all
, the population around the
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world
has increased
rapidly
in the last century,
especially
after the second
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world
war.
However
, a huge amount of
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people
has emigrated from rural areas to
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big
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cities
and it causes overpopulation. Due to lack of infrastructure
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system
, individuals have preferred to have a private
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car
. The number of motor ownership has increased by 300% in the last decade as per the
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World
Bank.
For instance
,
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before
and after working hours it would be impossible to
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use
a
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public
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transportation
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system
since
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people
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have to
wait around one hour to
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get
into a bus or subway.
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the reason why citizens tend to have an auto even if they are aware of the traffic jam around the city.
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,
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governments
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ask a question themselves that even if
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many
metropolitan
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cities
have a
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public
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transportation
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system
, why individuals prefer to
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use
the automobile?

When we look at the answer, I believe that
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governments
should take
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some
restriction to
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prevent
an increasing number of
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car
ownership.
Firstly
, there should be another city tax, which ensures if a
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car
enters the central zone, the owner
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has to
pay a fee.
For instance
,
especially
at the time
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before
and after working hours which are likely 8-9 am and 6-7 pm, the fees of bridges, roads, or parking areas
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have to
be increased
by
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governments
or municipalities.
Moreover
, the authorities
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have to
increase the ratio of the investment of the infrastructure projects and guarantee that
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public
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transportation
is cheaper, faster and most
importantly
more quality.
For instance
, if a person could be able to reach its office by subway, there would no need his car.

In conclusion
, in the light of the information
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given
above, even if there are
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some
proven causes of the
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people
to
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use
their
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car
, it should not
be forgotten
that if
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governments
raise the quality of
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public
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transportation
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system
and set
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some
penalties, citizens would benefit those
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systems
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 17

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
383 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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