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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v.12

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 12
In recent years, social development has led to improved people’s lives, so people can own a car for themselves without difficulty. In result, traffic congestions and dust pollution from the vehicle exhaust. The first question mentions to the perception of each and give advices to the government to overcome those matters. There are many problems around the world today, but transportation congestion is one of the crucial issues in the developing countries. More and more people earning a high income, so the need to own an auto is obvious. Although The car is the transit and is also safer to drive an automobile rather than a motorbike. Furthermore, it is the face of the owner, everyone wants to buy a car for themselves. Fro example: In Southeast Asia or China, all are developing countries, and traffic congestion occurs daily, the government of those is facing certain difficulties in solving this matters. I think the government should invest the development of public vehicle transport such as Bus, train. . And limit the number of hours for each person. State agencies can increase the number of buses and build train systems to meet the need of people. In addition, They should establish a system of controlling the time of vehicles travelling on the road. Although these measures may not solve them all, but they minimize traffic jams and air pollution. For instance, In Japan or European countries, their public transport is very developed and people going on picnics without worrying too much about driving. In summary, vehicle restriction and public transport development are important. It helps people save time and save money for the state.
In recent years, social development has led to
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improved
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people’s
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lives
,
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so
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people
can
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own
a car for themselves without difficulty. In result, traffic congestions and dust pollution from the
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vehicle
exhaust. The
first
question mentions to the perception of each and give advices to the
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government
to overcome those matters.

There are
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many
problems around the world
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today
,
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but
transportation congestion is one of the crucial issues in the
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developing countries
. More and more
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people
earning a high income,
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so
the need to
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own
an auto is obvious. Although The car is the transit and is
also
safer to drive an automobile
rather
than a motorbike.
Furthermore
, it is the face of the owner, everyone wants to
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buy
a car for themselves.
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example: In Southeast Asia or China, all are
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developing countries
, and traffic congestion occurs daily, the
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government
of those is facing certain difficulties in solving this matters.

I
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think
the
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government
should invest the development of public
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vehicle
transport such as Bus, train.
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.
And limit the number of hours for each person. State agencies can increase the number of buses and build train systems to
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meet
the need of
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people
.
In addition
, They should establish a system of controlling the time of
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vehicles
travelling on the road. Although these measures may not solve them all,
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but
they minimize traffic jams and air pollution.
For instance
, In Japan or European countries, their public transport is
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very
developed and
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people
going on picnics without worrying too much about driving.

In summary,
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vehicle
restriction and public transport development are
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important
. It
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helps
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people
save time and save money for the state.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 12

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
273 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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