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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'on ebig traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v.1

Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'on ebig traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 1
During the last three decades the rising number of cars owned by people has deeply influenced traffic in many cities in the world. This essay will first address the question of how real is the change claimed in the statement and it will then discuss what could governments do to regulate cars' using. As a result of the automobiles' market diversification, has become easier to buy a car due to the lower costs, but this entails a greater number of vehicles on the streets which are not made to let all these cars circulating. For example, in a city like Rome because of the large number of tourist places, it is not possible to build an efficient street system that permits to distribute traffic in an effective way. Concerning the question about the measures that governments could take to dishearten vehicle usage, I think that one of the viable solution is to increase fuel taxes. In fact, this will make possible a decrease in using automobiles and together with public transport improvements will solve traffic congestion. For instance, as a result of a five years research conducted by The Department of Transport, thanks to a series of strengthening of bus services and to the subway lines, traffic congestion in London has decreased about the 4, 5%. In conclusion, due to the fact that became easier to acquire a car, transforming cities in a 'huge traffic jam' a doable solution could be increase gasoline prices and powering public transport services in order to solve the issue.
During the last three decades the rising number of
cars
owned
by
people
has
deeply
influenced
traffic
in
many
cities in the world. This essay will
first
address the question of how real is the
change
claimed in the statement and it will then discuss what could
governments
do to regulate cars' using.

As a result
of the automobiles' market diversification, has become easier to
buy
a
car
due to the lower costs,
but
this entails a greater number of vehicles on the streets which are not made to
let
all these
cars
circulating.
For example
, in a city like Rome
because
of the large number of tourist places, it is not possible to build an efficient street system that permits to distribute
traffic
in an effective way
.

Concerning the question about the measures that
governments
could take to dishearten vehicle usage, I
think
that one of the viable solution is to increase fuel taxes. In fact, this will
make
possible a decrease in using automobiles and together with public transport improvements will solve
traffic
congestion.
For instance
,
as a result
of a five years research conducted by The Department of Transport, thanks to a series of strengthening of bus services and to the subway lines,
traffic
congestion in London has decreased about the 4, 5%.

In conclusion
, due to the fact that became easier to acquire a
car
, transforming cities in a 'huge
traffic
jam' a doable solution could be increase gasoline prices and powering public transport services in order to solve the issue.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'on ebig traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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